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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.6

Should private schools receive government funding? v. 6
One of the most conspicuous trends in today's world is to study in private schools. Some people believe that commercial schools should receive funds. On the other hand, others argue that private schools earn enough money to maintain their institutions. In my view, I believe that state funding is not required in corporate schools and this essay will explain them in detail. Firstly, to acquire high standard training and stand tall in the recruitment process many people tend to join in corporate schools; however, high fee costs include standard curriculum and essential recreational facilities to provide quality teaching. For instance, lack of proper facilities in local school parents is willing to send their children to private schools for better learning. Needless to say, increased standard of living demands quality discipline and commercial schools target students with high standard teaching. Secondly, there are some pitfalls that can overwhelm the potential benefits of reward structure in private schools. Many educational institutions are exploiting the boom of private schools by charging huge amounts from pupils. Moreover, lack of governing body to regulate payment structure can make educational institutions charge more than required. For example, schools in India are exploiting the lack of facilities in public schools and earn more money. Hence, establishing governing bodies to regulate fees and restrict over boarding schools for more money. In conclusion, one can conclude that governing body funding is not required, but central should audit private institutions ceiling limits and salary structure. Finally, the role of government is too dire to ignore.
One of the most conspicuous trends in
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today
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schools
.
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Some
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people
believe that commercial
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schools
should receive funds.
On the other hand
, others argue that
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private
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schools
earn
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enough
money to maintain their institutions. In my view, I believe that state funding is not required in corporate
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schools
and this essay will
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explain
them in detail.

Firstly
, to acquire high
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standard
training and stand tall in the recruitment process
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many
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people
tend to
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join
in corporate
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schools
;
however
, high fee costs include
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standard
curriculum and essential recreational facilities to provide quality teaching.
For instance
, lack of proper facilities in local
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school
parents is willing to
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send
their children to
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private
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schools
for better learning. Needless to say, increased
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standard
of living demands quality discipline and commercial
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schools
target students with high
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standard
teaching.

Secondly
, there are
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some
pitfalls that can overwhelm the potential benefits of reward structure in
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private
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schools
.
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Many
educational institutions are exploiting the boom of
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private
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schools
by charging huge amounts from pupils.
Moreover
, lack of governing body to regulate payment structure can
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make
educational institutions charge more than required.
For example
,
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schools
in India are exploiting the lack of facilities in public
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schools
and earn more money.
Hence
, establishing governing bodies to regulate fees and restrict over boarding
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schools
for more money.

In conclusion
, one can conclude that governing body funding is not required,
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but
central should audit
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private
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institutions
ceiling limits and salary structure.
Finally
, the role of
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government
is too dire to
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ignore
.
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IELTS essay Should private schools receive government funding? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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