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In some countries, privately owned transport systems have a poor safety record. Yet, it is the government, who have ultimate responsibility for public safety. How can governments ensure that private companies do not neglect safety regulations? v.1

In some countries, privately owned transport systems have a poor safety record. Yet, it is the government, who have ultimate responsibility for public safety. How can governments ensure that private companies do not neglect safety regulations? v. 1
In recent times, in a number of countries private transport companies ignore public safety rules, which has led to a low safety record. To root out the problem, being liable for their citizens’ safeness, the authorities should shift current carrying out transport policy from a theoretical to practical ones by introducing new, reconsidered safety regulations and aid financially to the companies to upgrade their transports. To begin with, the major reason for the issue of public safety occurs as in some countries, people expound negative attitudes toward the professional and communication skills of the drivers of owned transport companies. Behind, the services being realized by the transport companies do not respond even to the basic transportation requirements and the high number (micro)buses have to be upgraded. Accordingly, subsidizing a company to purchase highly modernized, congenial transport, the government ensures the stable rate of public safety. Not only funding but also teaching drivers to the satisfactory skills to drive should be in a prior. Moreover, an increasing amount of road accidents in the participation of drivers of privately owned transport companies is another cause for the issue. The considerable solution to this is to provide regular inspections and penalties if such companies are not operating safely. In case, if the authorities find precarious practices resulting from an inspection, they can refuse to allow the company to keep on trading. In addition, such an experience, with a great possibility might be a powerful motivation for privately owned transport companies to maintain good standards. In conclusion, the reasonable actions to ensure public safety and complying regulations are some financial support and offering to the drivers of companies special driving courses. Then, to move on more severe way which includes, penalizing them for neglecting safeness laws.
In recent times, in a number of countries private
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transport
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companies
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ignore
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public
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safety
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rules
, which has led to a low
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safety
record. To root out the problem, being liable for their citizens’ safeness, the authorities should shift
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current
carrying out
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transport
policy from a theoretical to practical ones by introducing new, reconsidered
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safety
regulations and aid
financially
to the
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companies
to upgrade their transports.

To
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begin
with, the major reason for the issue of
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public
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safety
occurs as in
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some
countries,
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people
expound
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negative
attitudes toward the professional and communication
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skills
of the
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drivers
of
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owned
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transport
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companies
. Behind, the services
being realized
by the
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transport
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companies
do not respond even to the basic transportation requirements and the high number (micro)buses
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have to
be upgraded
.
Accordingly
, subsidizing a
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company
to
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purchase
highly
modernized, congenial
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transport
, the
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government
ensures the stable rate of
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public
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safety
. Not
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only
funding
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but
also
teaching
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drivers
to the satisfactory
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skills
to drive should be in a prior.

Moreover
, an increasing amount of road accidents in the participation of
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drivers
of
privately
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owned
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transport
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companies
is another cause for the issue. The considerable solution to this is to provide regular inspections and penalties if such
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companies
are not operating
safely
. In case, if the authorities find precarious practices resulting from an inspection, they can refuse to
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allow
the
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company
to
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keep
on trading.
In addition
, such an experience, with a great possibility might be a powerful motivation for
privately
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owned
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transport
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companies
to maintain
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good
standards.

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In
conclusion, the reasonable actions to ensure
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public
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safety
and complying regulations are
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some
financial support and offering to the
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drivers
of
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companies
special driving courses. Then, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
on more severe way which includes, penalizing them for neglecting safeness laws.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, privately owned transport systems have a poor safety record. Yet, it is the government, who have ultimate responsibility for public safety. How can governments ensure that private companies do not neglect safety regulations? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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