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In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 1
For university students, some people insist that the university should set their dormitory rooms and roommates while other groups say that it is better to give students a choice when they are planning to stay in school. However, there are more reasonable supporting details which support second views. On the other hand, to be assigned room conditions and roommates from university has a benefit that students can learn how to bring up problems and solve them with new random people. In real life, we cannot avoid facing new individuals and adapting to make a proper agreement among really different personalities, so it is very important to learn how to deal with problems occurring from apposed opinions through having an assigned roommate. For instance, one survey in Korea proves that students who have experience living with new roommate feel more mature after graduate. Despite all the reasons, it is evident that most students in university want and need to choose their living mates, because schools cannot guarantee the compatibility of roommates. Certain types of people might feel difficult to share rooms because of totally different lifestyles, and even though they try hard to accept living together, sometimes it cannot be matched even a little. For example, if one student is a vegetarian, it causes embarrassing situations with other people, or when all room members are too lazy and dirty, it might affect to the condition of the room. All things considered, to prevent the worst unpredictable troubles, it is better for students choosing roommates during school life in spite of the advantages to learn adapting to new living conditions with different people when they are assigned roommates.
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insist that the
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should set their dormitory
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and
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while other groups say that it is better to give
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a choice when they are planning to stay in school.
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which support second views.

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conditions and
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from
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has a benefit that
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students
can learn how to bring up problems and solve them with
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. In real life, we cannot avoid facing
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individuals and adapting to
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to learn how to deal with problems occurring from apposed opinions through having an assigned
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roommate
.
For instance
, one survey in Korea proves that
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students
who have experience
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living
with
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new
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feel more mature after graduate.

Despite all the reasons, it is evident that most
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want and need to choose their
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mates,
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roommates
. Certain types of
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might feel difficult to share
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is a vegetarian, it causes embarrassing situations with other
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people
, or when all
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room
members are too lazy and dirty, it might affect to the condition of the room.

All things considered, to
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prevent
the worst unpredictable troubles, it is better for
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students
choosing
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roommates
during school life
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IELTS essay In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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