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In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world To what extent the benefits of this development outweigh the drawbacks v.2

In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 2
With the globalization, trading among different countries in the global develops significantly. Nowadays, it is easier for residents in one country to purchase commodities from other areas. This essay will discuss both pros and cons of this issue. To begin with, it is undeniable that there are a range of advantages of buying foods from all over the world. First and foremost, that there a wide diversity of foods from more countries is beneficial for consumers. In details, local inhabitants have countless opportunities to choose what they want to buy. Therefore, they can shop around and purchase the things they need at the cheapest price. In addition, this development has positive influences on both export and import countries. Regarding exporters, to produce a huge number of products, the demand of labours went up considerably. As a result, there will be more jobs and the rate of unemployment will reduce. In terms of importers, it will help these nations decline the pressure about producing foods within small farm area. On the other hand, importing foods from overseas can bring some adverse effects. Firstly, nourishment which is transported from aboard may be not fresh and unsafe. Due to the fact that it takes a long time to move commodities from foreign countries to inland, these foods can contain preservative which is harmful for people health. Moreover, that the quality of imported foods accelerate will threat the development of local commodities. For instance, the abundance of foods from overseas along with a suitable cost results in a remarkable decrease in consuming domestic products. This makes farmers face with more challenging circumstances. In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks of buying foods which shipped from other countries in the world, I strongly believe that the advantages of this development outstrip the disadvantages, especially in countries where the areas of agriculture land is narrowed.
With the globalization, trading among
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different
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countries
in the global develops
significantly
. Nowadays, it is easier for residents in one
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country
to
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purchase
commodities from other areas. This essay will discuss both pros and cons of this issue.

To
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begin
with, it is undeniable that there are a range of advantages of buying
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foods
from all over the world.
First
and foremost, that there a wide diversity of
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foods
from more
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countries
is beneficial for consumers. In
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details
, local inhabitants have countless opportunities to choose what they want to
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buy
.
Therefore
, they can shop around and
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purchase
the things they need at the cheapest price.
In addition
, this development has
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positive
influences on both export and import
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countries
. Regarding exporters, to produce a huge number of products, the demand of
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labours
went up
considerably
.
As a result
, there will be more jobs and the rate of unemployment will
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reduce
. In terms of importers, it will
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help
these nations decline the pressure about producing
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foods
within
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small
farm area.

On the other hand
, importing
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foods
from overseas can bring
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some
adverse effects.
Firstly
, nourishment which
is transported
from aboard may be not fresh and unsafe. Due to the fact that it takes a long time to
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move
commodities from foreign
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countries
to inland, these
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foods
can contain preservative which is harmful for
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people
health.
Moreover
, that the quality of imported
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foods
accelerate will threat the development of local commodities.
For instance
, the abundance of
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foods
from overseas along with a suitable cost results in a remarkable decrease in consuming domestic products. This
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makes
farmers face with more challenging circumstances.

In conclusion
, although there are
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some
drawbacks of buying
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foods
which shipped from other
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countries
in the world, I
strongly
believe that the advantages of this development outstrip the disadvantages,
especially
in
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countries
where the areas of agriculture land
is narrowed
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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