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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v.4

In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 4
At the present time marriage partners are chosen by people themselves, but in the near past, this decision was made by their parents. In my view, despite those parents don't wish bad to their child, people should choose by themselves who they love. Due to that, they will spend whole their life together. The following essay will discuss both sides of this issue. Since the dawn of the time, the marriage was an important part of our life. Because of that choice of a partner is a tough decision and people have to consider all details before the marriage. In the near past children almost hadn't rights to choose partner by themselves, in fact, only parents could decide who their child is going to marry. Parents raised a child and all decisions related to their child should be made by them. Parents know their kid better than everyone and when they are giving them in marriage, they are taking into account the character of kid. But currently this situation has been changed, due to that some parents aren’t concerned about the future of their child and trying to give their child to a family which is rich, it is not always fair towards to children. Without love, there is no future for their kids and as a result, it leads to divorce. Even then, there are no ideal people and everyone could make a mistake, even when they are choosing their future partner by themselves. People always fall in love with each other before the marriage. After that, their relationships would become colder and it also could lead to divorce. After analysing both sides of this issue, I've concluded that in spite of those parents taking into account all details, sometimes they are forgotten about love. The main thing of marriage is to bind two people which are in love with each other. Thus, people should choose whom they love by themselves.
At the present time
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marriage
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partners
are chosen
by
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people
themselves,
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but
in the near past, this decision
was made
by their
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parents
. In my view, despite those
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parents
don't wish
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bad
to their
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child
,
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people
should choose by themselves who they
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love
. Due to that, they will spend whole their life together. The following essay will discuss both sides of this issue.

Since the dawn of the time, the
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marriage
was an
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important
part of our life.
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Because
of that choice of a
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partner
is a tough decision and
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people
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have to
consider all
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details
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before
the
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marriage
. In the near past children almost hadn't rights to choose
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partner
by themselves, in fact,
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only
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parents
could decide who their
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child
is going to marry.
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Parents
raised a
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child
and all decisions related to their
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child
should
be made
by them.
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Parents
know their kid better than everyone and when they are giving them in
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marriage
, they are taking into account the character of kid.

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But
currently
this situation has been
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changed
, due to that
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some
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parents
aren’t concerned about the future of their
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child
and trying to give their
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child
to a family which is rich, it is not always
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fair
towards to children. Without
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love
, there is no future for their kids and
as a result
, it leads to divorce. Even then, there are no ideal
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people
and everyone could
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make
a mistake, even when they are choosing their future
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partner
by themselves.
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People
always fall in
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love
with each other
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before
the
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marriage
. After that, their relationships would become colder and it
also
could lead to divorce.

After
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analysing
both sides of this issue, I've concluded that
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in spite of
those
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parents
taking into account all
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details
,
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sometimes
they
are forgotten
about
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love
. The main thing of
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marriage
is to bind two
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people
which are in
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love
with each other.
Thus
,
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people
should choose whom they
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love
by themselves.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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