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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v.7

In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 7
It is a fact that in several countries, marriages are still set by parents, but in other countries, people have their own right to choose their wedding partners. The mixtures of these two trends are also common in many societies and countries. The following essay will discuss both facts, but I do believe that it is better for us to choose our own partner. For a number of reasons, some parents still follow the tradition of choosing a partner for their child. Firstly, since it is a tradition that has been passed on for so many generations in the society. They are afraid that it might be a taboo if they do not follow it and could be isolated by the community. Secondly, they believe that parents would give the best of everything to their child. They think that parents are wiser and more mature, therefore they could select a good partner for their child. However, other groups of people disagree with the above statement, as they believe that people should have the right to choose their own partner. They believe that a relationship should be built based on love and attraction, not based on enforcement. As marriage becomes a special moment in someone’s life, he should get married to the person he loves or he might regret it for the rest of his life. Therefore, they all agree that people should have their own right to choose their own married partner. In my opinion, I personally believe that we should have the right to choose our own spouse, as I agree that marriage is a special moment in someone’s life. And I think that the tradition of arranging married by parents should not be considered anymore as it is against the human right.
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still
set by
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parents
,
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but
in other countries,
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people
have their
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own
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right
to
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choose
their wedding
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partners
. The mixtures of these two trends are
also
common in
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many
societies and countries. The following essay will discuss both facts,
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but
I do
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believe
that it is better for us to
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choose
our
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own
partner.

For a number of reasons,
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some
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parents
still
follow the tradition of choosing a
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partner
for their child.
Firstly
, since it is a tradition that has
been passed
on for
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so
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many
generations in the society. They are afraid that it might be a taboo if they do not follow it and could
be isolated
by the community.
Secondly
, they
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believe
that
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parents
would give the best of everything to their child. They
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think
that
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parents
are wiser and more mature,
therefore
they could select a
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good
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partner
for their child.

However
, other groups of
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people
disagree with the above statement, as they
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believe
that
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people
should have the
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right
to
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choose
their
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own
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partner
. They
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believe
that a relationship should
be built
based on
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love
and attraction, not based on enforcement. As marriage becomes a special moment in someone’s life, he should
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get
married to the person he
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loves or
he might regret it for the rest of his life.
Therefore
, they all
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agree
that
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people
should have their
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own
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right
to
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choose
their
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own
married partner.

In my opinion, I
personally
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believe
that we should have the
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right
to
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choose
our
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own
spouse, as I
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agree
that marriage is a special moment in someone’s life. And I
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think
that the tradition of arranging married by
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parents
should not
be considered
anymore as it is against the human
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right
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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