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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v.5

In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 5
The idea that a marriage should be arranged by the parents of the couple, or by other members of the family, is quite acceptable to some societies, yet completely out of the question for others. It all depends on your cultural expectations. In so-called western societies, it is very unusual for marriages to be arranged. Most young people would not welcome the idea that their parents have the right to choose their partner for life. They feel that arranged marriages deny them their fundamental right to choose, even if they make a bad decision. However, if we are honest about it, we might acknowledge that some parents organise their children's lives in such a way that they are likely to meet and marry partners the parents approve o£ It could be said that this is, to some extent, similar to an arranged marriage. It is always better when families support the relationship and welcome the grandchildren. People for whom arranged marriages are the cultural norm often argue that the likelihood of the marriage lasting is greater when it is set up in this manner. Parents can be assured that their children are joining a family of similar standing and cultural background, and this, in the long run, makes for a more stable society if your parents' marriage was arranged, and has worked well, then why should you question the custom? The important thing to ensure is that people are never forced into a marriage which will make them unhappy or lead to an unequal relationship where one partner is exploited by the other. This applies in all societies and situations.
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parents
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societies
,
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-called western
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societies
, it is
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marriages
to be
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arranged
. Most young
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people
would not welcome the
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idea
that their
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parents
have the right to choose their partner for life. They feel that
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arranged
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marriages
deny them their fundamental right to choose, even if they
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make
a
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bad
decision.
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some
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parents
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organise
their children's
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lives
in such a way that they are likely to
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meet
and marry partners the
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parents
approve
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be said
that this is, to
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extent, similar to an
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arranged
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marriage
. It is always better when families support the relationship and welcome the grandchildren.

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for whom
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arranged
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marriages
are the cultural norm
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often
argue that the likelihood of the
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marriage
lasting is greater when it
is set
up in this manner.
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Parents
can
be assured
that their children are joining a family of similar standing and cultural background, and this, in the long run,
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makes
for a more stable
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society
if your parents'
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marriage
was
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arranged
, and has worked well, then why should you question the custom?

The
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important
thing to ensure is that
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people
are never forced into a
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marriage
which will
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make
them unhappy or lead to an unequal relationship where one partner
is exploited
by the other. This applies in all
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societies
and situations.
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IELTS essay In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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