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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v.6

In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 6
Marriage is a legal relationship between man and woman which is one of the most important parts in most of the human's life. As time went by, marriage has changed significantly. In the past, marriage was arranged by the parents or elderly relatives and it still happens today with the limited number. In contrast, nowadays, most of the people believe that choosing their own marriage partner is the best way to have a long-lasting relationship. This essay will compare and discuss both systems. Each country has its own culture and tradition. From thousands or more cultures, marriage is a common tradition almost in all countries and traditions. In some countries, mainly in Asia, arranged marriage is very common. Marriage is arranged by parents or flesh and blood to determine the best spouse for their children. It is believed by people who conduct this system that even if the bride and groom do not love each other at the beginning, love will bloom eventually. Moreover, these people assume that the benefits of arranged marriage outstrip the drawbacks. By arranging marriage, parents can protect their children from negative relationships like free sex or cohabitation. Besides, the possibility of divorce is declined since the parents generally select their children's spouse based on the similar background such as religion, tradition, language, and socio-economic class. From another point of view, many people support that marriage should be based on love. They believe that everyone has the rights to fall in love and take a decision about his/ her own marriage partner, without intervention from others. Love marriage or marriage which comes from an own choice is very popular in western countries and also in this modern era. It is commonly believed that if people marry because of love, they will have a romantic relationship. Since they have recognised each other, they are able to respect and accept their spouses' weaknesses. In addition, people who opt to this way have a responsibility for their own choice. They will try to cope with their problems and find solutions for their marriage's life. They understand that they cannot blame anyone, including their parents because the decision to marry comes from them. This is the trends I am inclined to. My personal preference is to marry for love and choosing my own life partner. In conclusion, both arranged marriage and love marriage have positive and negative sides. People can choose what they think good to do or not. Nevertheless, I believe that marriage is a sacred and beautiful relationship. If people decide to marry, they have to understand that respect to each other is as important as love. They should respect not only to their spouses but also to their parents and families.
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Marriage
is a legal
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relationship
between
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man
and woman which is one of the most
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important
parts in most of the human's life. As time went by,
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marriage
has
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changed
significantly
. In the past,
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marriage
was
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arranged
by the
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parents
or elderly relatives and it
still
happens
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today
with the limited number.
In contrast
, nowadays, most of the
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people
believe that choosing their
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own
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marriage
partner is the best way to have a long-lasting
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relationship
. This essay will compare and discuss both systems.

Each
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country
has its
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own
culture and
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tradition
. From thousands or more cultures,
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marriage
is a common
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tradition
almost in all
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countries
and
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traditions
. In
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some
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countries
,
mainly
in Asia,
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arranged
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marriage
is
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very
common.
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is
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arranged
by
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parents
or flesh and blood to determine the best spouse for their children. It
is believed
by
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people
who conduct this system that even if the bride and groom do not
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love
each
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other
at the beginning,
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love
will bloom
eventually
.
Moreover
, these
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people
assume that the benefits of
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arranged
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marriage
outstrip the drawbacks. By arranging
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marriage
,
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parents
can protect their children from
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negative
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relationships
like free sex or cohabitation.
Besides
, the possibility of divorce
is declined
since the
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parents
generally
select their children's spouse based on the similar background such as religion,
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tradition
, language, and
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socio-economic
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class
.

From another point of view,
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many
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people
support that
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marriage
should
be based
on
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love
. They believe that everyone has the rights to fall in
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love
and take a decision about his/ her
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own
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marriage
partner, without intervention from others.
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Love
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marriage
or
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marriage
which
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comes
from an
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own
choice is
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very
popular in western
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countries
and
also
in this modern era. It is
commonly
believed that if
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people
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marry
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because
of
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love
, they will have a romantic
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relationship
. Since they have
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recognised
each
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other
, they are able to respect and accept their spouses' weaknesses.
In addition
,
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people
who opt to this way have a responsibility for their
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own
choice. They will try to cope with their problems and find solutions for their marriage's life. They understand that they cannot blame anyone, including their
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parents
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because
the decision to
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marry
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comes
from them. This is the trends I
am inclined
to. My personal preference is to
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marry
for
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love
and choosing my
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own
life partner.

In conclusion
, both
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arranged
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marriage
and
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love
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marriage
have
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positive
and
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negative
sides.
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People
can choose what they
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think
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good
to do or not.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
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marriage
is a sacred and
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beautiful
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relationship
. If
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people
decide to
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marry
, they
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have to
understand that respect to each
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other
is as
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important
as
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love
. They should respect not
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only
to their spouses
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but
also
to their
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parents
and families.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
64Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
454 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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