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In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it? v.2

In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it? v. 2
It is certainly true that these days due to the advancements in the field of science and technology, most of the employers opt the fresh graduates to employ. However, aged people obviously have guts and accomplishments to climb the ladder of corporate hierarchy. It is high time, one must think of the experience and the positive outlook the elder people have towards any aspect. Nevertheless, there are apparent ways to solve it. To begin with, the main reasons could be the age factor, productivity, lowered work output, a way of thinking and mostly people over the age of 50 are usually Luddites. Today, all tasks primarily are being accomplished by using technology. Moreover, as the aged person generally may not be tech-savvy, this might be one possible reason for not recruiting them in good jobs. Furthermore, as a person becomes old, one would suffer from health implications which hinder the productivity at workplace. Nevertheless, it is undeniable fact that, some older people willingly do not want to work; they might want to spend their rest of the retired life with their children and grandchildren. Taking into considerations all the points it is clear why people over the age of 50 generally are not recruited in good jobs despite their experience. On the other hand, according to me, how much ever the technology develops, experience always stands ahead of the knowledge of novices. Hence, certain measures should be taken to address this moot issue. What I suggest is that the government can pay a crucial role by allotting employment allowances to the elder people. Next, the corporate companies perhaps, think to form an expert team comprising of aged people who could guide the younger employees to ensure the success of an organisation. To summarise, I believe that, there are several reasons behind this controversial issue and the possible consequences, but, by excluding these, the elder people should be given respect and a chance to prove their talent and experience.
It is
certainly
true that these days due to the advancements in the field of science and technology, most of the employers opt the fresh graduates to employ.
However
, aged
people
obviously
have guts and accomplishments to climb the ladder of corporate hierarchy. It is high time, one
must
think
of the experience and the
positive
outlook the elder
people
have towards any aspect.
Nevertheless
, there are apparent ways to solve it.

To
begin
with, the main reasons could be the age factor, productivity, lowered work output, a way of thinking and
mostly
people
over the age of 50 are
usually
Luddites.
Today
, all tasks
primarily
are
being accomplished
by using technology.
Moreover
, as the aged person
generally
may not be tech-savvy, this might be one possible reason for not recruiting them in
good
jobs.
Furthermore
, as a person becomes
old
, one would suffer from health implications which hinder the productivity at workplace.
Nevertheless
, it is undeniable fact that,
some
older
people
willingly
do not want to work; they might want to spend their rest of the retired life with their children and grandchildren. Taking into considerations all the points it is
clear
why
people
over the age of 50
generally
are not recruited in
good
jobs despite their experience.

On the other hand
, according to me, how much ever the technology develops, experience always stands ahead of the knowledge of novices.
Hence
, certain measures should
be taken
to address this moot issue. What I suggest is that the
government
can pay a crucial role by allotting employment allowances to the elder
people
.
Next
, the corporate
companies
perhaps,
think
to form an expert team
comprising of
aged
people
who could guide the younger employees to ensure the success of an
organisation
.

To
summarise
, I believe that, there are several reasons behind this controversial issue and the possible consequences,
but
, by excluding these, the elder
people
should be
given
respect and a chance to prove their talent and experience.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it? v. 2

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