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Despite improvements in vehicle technology there are still large numbers of road accidents Explain some of the causes of these accidents and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem v.1

Despite improvements in vehicle technology there are still large numbers of road accidents Explain some of the causes of these accidents and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem v. 1
Human beings believe that students should be learnt at education places to reuse materials and prevent unwanted products whereas others perceive that they should be taught at home. In this state both the matter has to be explained properly. At the initial point, school is the place where students have to be taught by teachers not only related to study on the other hand life learning is necessary too. Recycling of materials and to avoid misuse products, both are two essential things to do in life. Both are helpful in preventing the pollution of environment, this is the means to avoid pollution. Recycling of materials has many advantages. Schools are the best form to teach all types of learning. Schools are the places where learners can get a chance to do practical on reusing the things. To avoid misuse products must be taught in schools in strictly way. The schools will teach the meaning of this study in a fortunate style, which will helpful in students' personal lives. For teaching, a compulsory subject should be added by education, government, which will be very advantages for students. Second opinion states that it should be taught at home. Somehow it is right, parents have some responsibilities to their own children. When guardians taught recycling and avoiding of waste products to young ones, they will know the importance of it, too. By this step with students, parents will apply this matter in their lives too. Now a day teaching system is growing harder and harder, so to avoid the burden, these topics can be easily taught by home. In conclusion, an opinion that I would like to suggest is that the all of the topics must be learnt at educational places with beneficial practical information. That would be more interesting.
Human beings believe that students should be
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learnt at
education
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places
to reuse materials and
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prevent
unwanted
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products
whereas others perceive that they should
be taught
at home. In this state both the matter
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has to
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
properly
.

At the initial point,
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school
is the
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place
where students
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have to
be taught
by teachers not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
related to study
on the other hand
life learning is necessary too. Recycling of materials and to
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avoid
misuse
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products
, both are two essential things to do in life. Both are helpful in preventing the pollution of environment, this is the means to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
avoid
pollution. Recycling of materials has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages.
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Schools
are the best form to teach all types of learning.
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Schools
are the
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places
where learners can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a chance to do practical on reusing the things. To
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avoid
misuse
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be taught
in
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schools
in
strictly
way. The
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schools
will teach the meaning of this study
Consider replacing "in a fortunate style" with the adverb for "fortunate"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a fortunate style
, which will helpful in students' personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. For teaching, a compulsory subject should be
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added
by education,
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government
, which will be
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very
advantages for students.

Second opinion states that it should
be taught
at home. Somehow it is right, parents have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
responsibilities to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
children. When guardians taught recycling and avoiding of waste
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
to young ones, they will know the importance of it, too. By this step with students, parents will apply this matter in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
too.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
a day teaching system is growing harder and harder,
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so
to
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avoid
the burden, these topics can be
easily
taught by home.

In conclusion
, an opinion that I would like to suggest is that the
Consider using "all the".
all of the
topics
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
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learnt at
educational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
with beneficial practical information. That would be more interesting.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Despite improvements in vehicle technology there are still large numbers of road accidents Explain some of the causes of these accidents and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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