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In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacations time each year. In other countries, employees are given four to six weeks of paid vacation time. Consider the needs of both employee and employer, what do you think is the reasona v.1

In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacations time each year. In other countries, employees are given four to six weeks of paid vacation time. Consider the needs of both employee and employer, what do you think is the reasona v. 1
In today’s competitive world, companies are adopted so may strategies for their better profit and that’s why they adopted many advertising in different ways. Apart from that traditionally use now companies use Television, Radio and most of the common way is internet for advertising. I tend to agree that some method of advertising adopted by companies is unethical and unacceptable. In the beginning, we can say that some methods of advertising puts influence the people to buy unnecessary things. The main effect of advertising is on children. Children attract about various things which they see in advertising and they force their parents to buy for themselves. Moreover, companies hire some celebrity for advertising. Because of that, indigenous people attract towards that thing. Some of advertising influence bad habit of society while they waste their money on a bad product. In addition, some advertisings are too unethical like smoking and alcohol advertising. That type of advertising banned in some countries. This type of advertising puts a bad effect on society while people tend to buy this thing without think their own health. Furthermore, consuming that unethical product may cause to physical problem. On the other hand, apart from that unacceptable thing there are so many things which are ethical. Some product advertising is necessary for people to know what they are buying. Advertising also describe the quality of things. In my perspective, we have to understand what we are consuming. Because some product is detrimental to ourselves. So in my opinion, we can only know that things because of advertising. Having said that, advertising also creates employment. To sum up, some unethical and unacceptable advertising creates a negative effect on people and kids. In my way, this type of advertising should be banned by the Government.
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agree
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some
methods of advertising puts influence the
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buy
unnecessary things. The main effect of advertising is on children. Children attract about various things which they
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see
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advertising and
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buy
for themselves.
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celebrity for advertising.
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advertisings
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unethical
like smoking and alcohol advertising. That type of advertising banned in
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countries. This type of advertising puts a
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health.
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may cause to physical problem.

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things which are ethical.
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advertising is necessary for
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to know what they are buying. Advertising
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the quality of things. In my perspective, we
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is detrimental to ourselves.
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in my opinion, we can
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of advertising. Having said that, advertising
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some
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unethical
and unacceptable advertising creates a
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effect on
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people
and kids. In my way, this type of advertising should
be banned
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Government
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IELTS essay In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacations time each year. In other countries, employees are given four to six weeks of paid vacation time. Consider the needs of both employee and employer, what do you think is the reasona v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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