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In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacation time each year. In other countries, employees are given four or six weeks of paid vacation time. Considering the needs of both employee and employer, what do you think is a reasonable amount of paid vacation time for employees to have? v.3

In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacation time each year. In other countries, employees are given four or six weeks of paid vacation time. Considering the needs of both employee and employer, what do you think is a reasonable amount of paid vacation time for employees to have? v. 3
While some are of the opinion that there ought to be a fixed punishment for any kind of crime, others believe that before making decisions for an offence committed, the motives as well as the situations of the person involved should be taken into consideration. Analysing both sides of the arguments, I believe that before agreeing to a consensus, motivations and reasons for committing vices should be taken into account. On one hand, proponents in support of fixed punishment should be attributed to any form of crime because it will drive people away from such act. In other words, no matter the level of crime committed, there will always be a constant judgement attached to it. For example, an individual caught as a result of either stealing from the parents or robbing a bank (financial institution) will attract the same penalty. This will make individuals to derelict from involving in crimes at a tender age. Thus, each type of criminal act committed should go along with a punishment that is not variable. On the other hand, it is also argued by many that the conditions and zeal to involve in bad things should be considered. First and foremost, the verdict to be passed will be decided on unlike having a capital punishment for any crime. Criminal offence can be carried out either intentionally or accidentally. Take an example, there is a difference when it comes to applying defensive mechanism in a shooting scene against the antagonists and assassination of innocent citizens during a gun battle. If any form of punishment is to be allocated for both, the later will face a more serious penalty than the former. So therefore, every crime decisions to be made should bring put into account circumstances and motivations behind it. To conclude, it is argued that capital punishment by death should be passed for each type of criminal act, I think that it is to be decided upon the reasons and circumstances for such act to be committed. If these measures are implemented, crimes will be based on the severity.
While
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some
are of the opinion that there ought to be a
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fixed
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punishment
for any kind of
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crime
, others believe that
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before
making decisions for an
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offence
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committed
, the motives
as well
as the situations of the person involved should
be taken
into consideration.
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Analysing
both sides of the arguments, I believe that
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before
agreeing to a consensus, motivations and reasons for committing vices should
be taken
into account.

On one hand, proponents in support of
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fixed
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punishment
should
be attributed
to any form of
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crime
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because
it will drive
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people
away from such
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act
.
In other words
, no matter the level of
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crime
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committed
, there will always be a constant judgement attached to it.
For example
, an individual caught
as a result
of either stealing from the parents or robbing a bank (financial institution) will attract the same penalty. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
individuals to derelict from involving in
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crimes
at a tender age.
Thus
, each type of criminal
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act
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committed
should go along with a
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punishment
that is
not variable.

On the other hand
, it is
also
argued by
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many
that the conditions and zeal to involve in
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bad
things should
be considered
.
First
and foremost, the verdict to
be passed
will
be decided
on unlike having a capital
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punishment
for any
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crime
. Criminal
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offence
can
be carried
out either
intentionally
or
accidentally
. Take an example, there is a difference when it
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comes
to applying defensive mechanism in a shooting scene against the antagonists and assassination of innocent citizens during a gun battle. If any form of
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punishment
is to
be allocated
for both, the later will face a more serious penalty than the former.
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So
therefore
, every
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crime
decisions to
be made
should bring put into account circumstances and motivations behind it.

To conclude
, it
is argued
that capital
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punishment
by death should
be passed
for each type of criminal
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act
, I
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think
that it is to
be decided
upon the reasons and circumstances for such
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act
to be
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committed
. If these measures
are implemented
,
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crimes
will
be based
on the severity.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries, employees are generally given two weeks of paid vacation time each year. In other countries, employees are given four or six weeks of paid vacation time. Considering the needs of both employee and employer, what do you think is a reasonable amount of paid vacation time for employees to have? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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