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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure? Have you any reservations? v.3

As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. Have you any reservations? v. 3
The desire of human to live for as many years as possible is gradually becoming a reality. Scientists have now deduced several ways to replicate the human body parts, but this discovery, however, infuriates some groups of people. In my opinion, such procedure is a welcome development because it will put an end to losing loved ones and will encourage further innovative researches. Firstly, medical innovations are one of the most sort after researches in the world due to the increasing numbers of deadly ailments that is befalling mankind. For many years, the medical fields have relied on generous donors who willingly tender their body organs such as kidneys and bone marrow, while some even donate their hearts upon demise. While this might serve as good news to the loved ones of the victims, some people think this kind gesture is inhumane and shocking to some extent. Cloning human beings in other to secure vital and urgently needed organs is clearly a welcome development and can indeed put some smiles on the faces of the society who would have been mourning someone dearly. In addition, enormous amount of money often goes into the budget of many nations for the purpose of finding medical revelations in some rare cases. This I believe pave way for new innovative ideas and breakthrough in the medical fields. For over 5 decades, there has been intense research into finding a permanent cure for HIV/AIDS, but there is yet to be a significant revelation. However, through this research, the cure for Hepatitis A and B was discovered. Although some may discourage that it is an absolute waste of funds, resources and time, I believe it is undoubtedly a worthwhile approach with a lifetime reward. To sum up, while some people might feel that human cloning is fierce and inhumane, this new revelation has proven to save many lives and improved research methods in many productive ways. I strongly agree with this idea and have no reservation whatsoever for such practice.
The desire of
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to
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live
for as
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many
years as possible is
gradually
becoming a reality. Scientists have
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now
deduced several ways to replicate the
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human
body parts,
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but
this discovery,
however
, infuriates
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some
groups of
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people
. In my opinion, such procedure is a welcome development
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because
it will put an
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end
to losing
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loved
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ones
and will encourage
further
innovative researches.

Firstly
,
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medical
innovations are one of the most sort after
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researches
in the world due to the increasing numbers of deadly ailments
that is
befalling mankind. For
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many
years, the
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medical
fields have relied on generous donors who
willingly
tender their body organs such as kidneys and bone marrow, while
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some
even donate their hearts upon demise. While this might serve as
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good
news to the
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loved
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ones
of the victims,
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some
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people
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think
this kind gesture is inhumane and shocking to
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some
extent. Cloning
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human
beings in other to secure vital and
urgently
needed organs is
clearly
a welcome development and can
indeed
put
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some
smiles on the faces of the society who would have been mourning someone
dearly
.

In addition
, enormous amount of money
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often
goes into the budget of
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many
nations for the purpose of finding
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medical
revelations in
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some
rare cases. This I believe pave way for new innovative
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ideas
and breakthrough in the
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medical
fields. For over 5 decades, there has been intense
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research
into finding a permanent cure for HIV/AIDS,
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but
there is
yet
to be a significant revelation.
However
, through this
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research
, the cure for Hepatitis A and B
was discovered
. Although
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some
may discourage that it is an absolute waste of funds, resources and time, I believe it is
undoubtedly
a worthwhile approach with a lifetime reward.

To sum up, while
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some
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people
might feel that
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human
cloning is fierce and inhumane, this new revelation has proven to save
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many
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lives
and
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improved
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research
methods in
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many
productive ways. I
strongly
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agree
with this
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idea
and have no reservation whatsoever for such practice.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. Have you any reservations? v. 3

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4 paragraphs
334 words
8.5
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