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In some countries and increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v.2

In some countries and increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 2
In modern times the issue of healthy food has become highly controversial, because number of people like to eat outside of homes. It has been suggested that authorities take effective action on this type of meal. I partially disagree with this idea, in this essay I will provide some arguments to support my opinion. There are variety of reasons why people suffering from disease like water pollution, air pollution and many others. Nowadays, air pollution is biggest problem in most of the countries. Two field are most contributing in air pollution, first day by day increasing companies and factories and second is, day-by-day rising private vehicles. Because of that increasing number of humans which is suffering from skin diseases, asthma problem and breathing allergy. These diseases patient is increasing everyday in the world. Second argument, un pure water using for drink and consumption, which is very unhealthy for our body. Un pure water bad effect on our digestion and sometimes diarrhea and vomit happen for that. Apart from that, people do not care about their diet. They eat meal anytime, that is totally wrong for their stomach. People have no fix schedule for eating. On the other hand, authorities higher tax receive on the junk food. That is working to some extent. If ready-made food expensive then, customers definitely think before buying fast food. In conclusion, this is a topic which is very relevant to modern society. However, I believe quite strongly that authorities make food checking department which is available in the whole country. If the governments implement this policy, it will provide a better life for future generations.
In modern times the issue of healthy
food
has become
highly
controversial,
because
number of
people
like to eat outside of homes. It has
been suggested
that authorities take effective action on this type of meal. I
partially
disagree with this
idea
, in this essay I will provide
some
arguments to support my opinion.

There are variety of reasons why
people
suffering from disease like water
pollution
, air
pollution
and
many
others. Nowadays, air
pollution
is
biggest
problem in most of the countries. Two
field
are most contributing in air
pollution
,
first
day by day increasing
companies
and factories and second is, day-by-day rising private vehicles.
Because
of that increasing number of humans which is suffering from skin diseases, asthma problem and breathing allergy. These diseases patient is increasing
everyday
in the world.

Second argument,
un
pure water using for drink and consumption, which is
very
unhealthy for our body.
Un
pure water
bad
effect on our digestion and
sometimes
diarrhea and vomit happen for that. Apart from that,
people
do not care about their diet. They eat meal anytime,
that is
totally
wrong
for their stomach.
People
have no
fix
schedule for eating.

On the other hand
, authorities higher tax receive on the junk
food
.
That is
working to
some
extent. If ready-made
food
expensive then, customers definitely
think
before
buying
fast
food.

In conclusion
, this is a topic which is
very
relevant to modern society.
However
, I believe quite
strongly
that authorities
make
food
checking department which is available in the whole country. If the
governments
implement this policy, it will provide a better life for future generations.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries and increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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