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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words. v.8

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 8
here are both sociological and economical reasons to develop a healthy lifestyle and habits among individuals. After all, healthy citizens are the biggest asset of a nation. Some people, therefore, argue that the government should play an active role in ensuring that its citizens lead a healthy lifestyle. Others feel that it is up to the individual to decide how they should live. In my opinion, health is mainly a matter of individual responsibility. Even so, there are lots of things the government can do to promote a healthy lifestyle among its people. The government can make laws. It can ban things that are detrimental to the health of its people. For example, drugs are illegal in many countries. There are countries or states that ban alcohol and cigarettes. In some countries, the government imposes a high tax on junk food with the objective of discouraging its consumption. All of these are measures that can have a positive impact on the health of the people. Another very beneficial thing that the government can do for its people’s health is making vaccinations mandatory. Despite the fact that vaccines are safe and effective, many communities refuse to administer them to their children citing religious or other invalid reasons. By enacting laws that make vaccinations mandatory, the government can save millions of children from the clutches of diseases and death. Having said that, health is very much an individual matter. The government cannot monitor the lifestyle of every citizen. Even in countries where drugs are illegal, people still use them. They smoke and drink. They eat junk food and spend too much time in front of the TV or computer. They are aware of the consequences of their actions; yet they are too lazy or too ignorant to change their lifestyle. The government cannot do much to help these people. To conclude, there are lots of things that the government can do to improve the health of its citizens. However, the government alone cannot create a healthy society. Individuals need to make a conscious effort too.
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are both sociological and
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economical
reasons to develop a
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healthy
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lifestyle
and habits among
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individuals
.
After all
,
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healthy
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citizens
are the biggest asset of a nation.
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people
,
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, argue that the
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government
should play an active role in ensuring that its
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citizens
lead a
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healthy
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lifestyle
. Others feel that it is up to the
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individual
to decide how they should
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live
. In my opinion,
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health
is
mainly
a matter of
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individual
responsibility. Even
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so
, there are lots of things the
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government
can do to promote a
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healthy
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lifestyle
among its
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people
.

The
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government
can
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make
laws. It can ban things that are detrimental to the
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health
of its
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people
.
For example
, drugs are illegal in
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many
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countries
. There are
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countries
or states that ban alcohol and cigarettes. In
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some
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countries
, the
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government
imposes a high tax on junk food with the objective of discouraging its consumption. All of these are measures that can have a
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positive
impact on the
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health
of the
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people
. Another
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very
beneficial thing that the
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government
can do for its
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people’s
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health
is making vaccinations mandatory. Despite the fact that vaccines are safe and effective,
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many
communities refuse to administer them to their children citing religious or other invalid reasons. By enacting laws that
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make
vaccinations mandatory, the
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government
can save millions of children from the clutches of diseases and death.

Having said that,
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health
is
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very
much an
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individual
matter. The
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government
cannot monitor the
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lifestyle
of every
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citizen
. Even in
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countries
where drugs are illegal,
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people
still
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them. They smoke and drink. They eat junk food and spend too much time in front of the TV or computer.
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They
are aware of the consequences of their actions;
yet
they are too lazy or too ignorant to
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change
their
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lifestyle
. The
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government
cannot do much to
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help
these
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people
.

To conclude
, there are lots of things that the
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government
can do to
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improve
the
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health
of its
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citizens
.
However
, the
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government
alone cannot create a
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healthy
society.
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Individuals
need to
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make
a conscious effort too.
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IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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