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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.25

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 25
The jury is out on whether the federal government should impose levies on junk meals or not There are many scholars who would support this idea and a whole lot more will kick against it. I believe the government should intervene in this issue through taxation policies. Fast foods can be defined as processed foods which can be prepared within the shortest possible time. For example, Hamburgers, hot dogs, canned and processed meals, etc. Firstly, the concern of the government on the threats in which these diets poses can be said to be logical considering the trend in disease outbreak over the last two decades. More so, easy to make products have been found to be connected to certain health conditions like obesity, diabetes, cancer, and hypertension. Junks are said to be rich in cholesterol and low in minerals and vitamins. Also, a look at the life expectancy ratio in Nigeria is alarming, hence the need for certain measures of control. Manufacturers of these items argue that they are cheap products which are readily available to low income individuals in the country. However, they have failed to compare their arguments to the posing threat and increasing medical ailments caused by their products. As a result, there should be an increase in import duties on all raw materials used in the production of processed meats. This will help to reduce the circulation of these contents in the local market. In addition, increasing value added tax on the retail produce will discourage consumers from purchasing them. In conclusion, taxes have been an effective tool used by previous administrations in curbing certain behavior among the citizenry. Replicating this act will help to protect the lives of the average Nigerian. The agricultural sector should also be empowered to be able to meet the demand of the populace, when the need arises. For example, helping farmers grow healthy animals through natural processes should be the priority of the Food and Drug Administration.
The jury is out on whether the federal
government
should impose levies on junk meals or not There are
many
scholars who would support this
idea
and a
whole lot
more will kick against it. I believe the
government
should intervene in this issue through taxation policies.

Fast
foods can
be defined
as processed foods which can
be prepared
within the shortest possible time.
For example
, Hamburgers, hot dogs, canned and processed meals, etc.

Firstly
, the concern of the
government
on the threats in which these diets
poses
can
be said
to be logical considering the trend in disease outbreak over the last two decades. More
so
, easy to
make
products have
been found
to
be connected
to certain health conditions like obesity, diabetes, cancer, and hypertension. Junks
are said
to be rich in cholesterol and low in minerals and vitamins.
Also
, a look at the life expectancy ratio in Nigeria is alarming,
hence
the need for certain measures of control.

Manufacturers of these items argue that they are
cheap
products which are
readily
available to low income individuals in the country.
However
, they have failed to compare their arguments to the posing threat and increasing medical ailments caused by their products.

As a result
, there should be an increase in import duties on all raw materials
used
in the production of processed meats. This will
help
to
reduce
the circulation of these contents in the local market.
In addition
, increasing value
added
tax on the retail produce will discourage consumers from purchasing them.

In conclusion
, taxes have been an effective tool
used
by previous administrations in curbing certain behavior among the citizenry. Replicating this act will
help
to protect the
lives
of the average Nigerian. The agricultural sector should
also
be empowered
to be able to
meet
the demand of the populace, when the need arises.
For example
, helping farmers grow healthy animals through natural processes should be the priority of the Food and Drug Administration.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 25

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