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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.36

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion. v. 36
During the last decade an increasingly larger percentage of people suffer from health problems caused by consuming meals in fast foods. Why do fast foods have gained so much success and how can this be frighted? Fast foods have gained a very high popularity in the last decades principally because of the cheapness of their products: you are able to have a complete meal by spending just a few dollars. However, Fast foods’ increasing popularity has been accompanied by a consequent increase in health problems because the food that is sold by common fast foods, like Macdonalds or KFC, is what mostly is far from healthy. The over mentioned food is rich of preservatives, it is made by using very low quality raw materials, and this is also the reason why their prices are pretty much low. A possible solution to this problem could be introducing higher taxes on these types of foods so to discourage people to buy them. Moreover, It’s not only an economic reason which explains the fast foods’ success, but a “fastness” reason also has to be investigated. In facts, in large cities, such as New York City or London, generally workers receive very small time windows from their works to spend for having lunch so that they are forced to eat at fast foods to earn time and come back to work rapidly. So, despite of increasing taxes I suppose it would be a better idea to incentive the opening of “healthier” fast foods, which sell salads, vegetable based meals, fruits and so on. I think this solution would impact positively on the food commerce and it can be supported by few good achievements obtained by healthy fast foods that have been opened recently in different cities. For example, Chiquita's fast food is a place where people can enjoy fresh smoothies, and milkshakes made of fresh fruits and vegetables. It had gained a lot of success so that there was a period in which you were not able to walk through streets and do not see someone with a smoothy in the hands. In conclusion, although taxation policy is always a good approach, the governments need to integrate it with other methods such as education, communication, and so on to achieve the best result.
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increasingly
larger percentage of
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people
suffer from health problems caused by consuming meals in
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fast
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foods
. Why do
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fast
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foods
have gained
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so
much success and how can this
be frighted
?

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Fast
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foods
have gained a
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very
high popularity in the last decades
principally
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because
of the cheapness of their products: you are able to have a complete meal by spending
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just
a few dollars.
However
,
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Fast
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foods’
increasing popularity has
been accompanied
by a consequent increase in health problems
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because
the
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food
that
is sold
by common
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fast
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foods
, like
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Macdonalds
or KFC, is what
mostly
is far from healthy. The over mentioned
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food
is rich of preservatives, it
is made
by using
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very
low quality raw materials, and this is
also
the reason why their prices are pretty much low.

A possible solution to this problem could be introducing higher taxes on these types of
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foods
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so
to discourage
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people
to
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buy
them.
Moreover
, It’s not
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only
an economic reason which
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explains
the
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fast
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foods’
success,
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but
a “fastness” reason
also
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has to
be investigated
. In facts, in large cities, such as New York City or London,
generally
workers receive
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very
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small time
windows from their works to spend for having lunch
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so
that they
are forced
to eat at
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fast
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foods
to earn time and
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come
back to work
rapidly
.
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So
,
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despite of
increasing taxes I suppose it would be a better
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idea
to incentive the opening of “healthier”
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fast
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foods
, which sell salads, vegetable based meals, fruits and
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so
on. I
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think
this solution would impact
positively
on the
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food
commerce and it can
be supported
by few
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good
achievements obtained by healthy
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fast
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foods
that have
been opened
recently in
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different
cities.
For example
, Chiquita's
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fast
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food
is a place where
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people
can enjoy fresh smoothies, and milkshakes made of fresh fruits and vegetables. It had gained
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a lot of
success
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so
that there was a period in which you were not able to walk through streets and do not
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see
someone with a
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smoothy
in the hands.

In conclusion
, although taxation policy is always a
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good
approach, the
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governments
need to integrate it with other methods such as education, communication, and
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so
on to achieve the best result.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion. v. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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