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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.30

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent with this opinion? v. 30
Nowadays fast food restaurants are almost everywhere and people find it easier to eat there than to cook their own food. Also, it is probably cheaper than having a meal in another restaurant. As a consequence, people are now experiencing issues regarding their health due to the quality of the groceries in question. Some people think that having the government increase taxes on fast food is the only solution in order to prevent people from getting sick from eating too much junk food. This action could surely have the effect of making the food less affordable so people would be less inclined to buy it. Similarly, government taxes could encourage or even require restaurants to improve the quality of their products, even though this probably wouldn't be enough to help people's health conditions from getting worse. If we look at the problem from another side it is also very noticeable that sometimes, in many different countries, people do often tend to rely on fast food as their primary source of nutrition intake. The reason why that happens is that many products sold there are really cheap and always readily available so if someone works very long hours and doesn't have much money it's much easier to be attracted to these places. And for those of us who could afford it anyway, then it's not a problem if we really feel like buying something there. In conclusion, I would say I only partially agree with the government imposing taxes on fast food as I don't think it would be very useful. On the contrary, if these taxes were to be coupled new measures to make healthy food more affordable and to implement educational programs about nutrition, I think it would be much more effective.
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restaurants are almost everywhere and
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people
find it easier to eat there than to cook their
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food
.
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probably
cheaper than having a meal in another restaurant. As a consequence,
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people
are
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now
experiencing issues regarding their health due to the quality of the groceries in question.

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people
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think
that having the
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government
increase
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
is the
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only
solution in order to
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prevent
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people
from getting sick from eating too
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much
junk
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food
. This action could
surely
have the effect of making the
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food
less affordable
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so
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people
would be less inclined to
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buy
it.
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,
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government
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taxes
could encourage or even require restaurants to
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improve
the quality of their products,
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probably
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enough
to
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people
's health conditions from getting worse.

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also
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noticeable that
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, in
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many
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different
countries,
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people
do
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tend to rely on
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fast
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as their primary source of nutrition intake. The reason why that happens is that
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many
products sold there are
really
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cheap
and always
readily
available
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if someone works
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long hours and doesn't have
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much
money it's
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much
easier to
be attracted
to these places. And for those of us who could afford it anyway, then it's not a problem if we
really
feel like buying something there.

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, I would say I
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only
partially
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with the
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imposing
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taxes
on
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fast
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as I don't
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it would be
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very
useful.
On the contrary
, if these
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taxes
were to
be coupled
new measures to
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make
healthy
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food
more affordable and to implement educational programs about nutrition, I
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think
it would be
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much
more effective.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent with this opinion? v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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