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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v.3

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 3
One of the very least known universal challenges that most of the developing countries need to pay attention besides Environmental challenges are risks associated with the increasing population and illiteracy. Recent studies suggest that Tier 2 nations, especially India are prone to severe threat in the next decade with its ever-increasing population and underdeveloped education system. The alarming rise in birth rate and an acute decline in literacy rate over the last two years supports the claims of the recent surveys to a large extent. If these trends aren't addressed promptly, India might fail to create necessary employment opportunities to the next generation which in turn will create a huge gap between the upper class and lower class societies. The unsophisticated education system may not cater to the masses with its limited bandwidth and this will likely create a huge opportunity for the private education sector to boom. As poor can't afford the quality education, there might be a huge drop off rate from secondary schooling while the upper class will most likely attempt to migrate to other countries for higher studies which might have a significant impact on the overall economy as both the problems are very much interlinked. Many economists and renowned former politicians suggest the following 5 practices that can help India to address these challenges. 1. Central Government of India should work closely with their State counterparts to understand the gaps in the education system and deploy a committee to drive awareness of education among the people. 2. The government should periodically review the progress of their initiatives once every quarter and take necessary steps to refine the process. 3. Sanction more funds to develop the education infrastructure such as upgrading school buildings, adapt interactive learning methods, increase the scholarships for the eligible candidates etc. 4. To address the challenges with regards to population, the Indian Government should handle campaigns to drive family planning awareness among the public. 5. Draw census records once every two years to assess the growth based on accurate numbers rather than working on estimates on a pro-rate basis. While central cabinet has already started drafting plans to address these challenges, public surveys appeal the prime minister to incorporate the above 5 suggestions into their action plan. In conclusion, although we may not see the results pouring down from day one, at least we should see a steady improvement and more robust outcomes in the long run.
One of the
very
least known universal
challenges
that most of the
developing countries
need to pay attention
besides
Environmental
challenges
are
risks
associated with the increasing population and illiteracy.

Recent studies suggest that Tier 2 nations,
especially
India are prone to severe threat in the
next
decade with its ever-increasing population and underdeveloped
education
system. The alarming rise in birth rate and an acute decline in literacy rate over the last two years supports the claims of the recent surveys to a large extent.

If these trends aren't addressed
promptly
, India might fail to create necessary employment opportunities to the
next
generation which in turn will create a huge gap between the upper
class
and lower
class
societies.

The unsophisticated
education
system may not cater to the masses with its limited bandwidth and this will likely create a huge opportunity for the private
education
sector to boom. As poor can't afford the quality
education
, there might be a huge drop off rate from secondary schooling while the upper
class
will most likely attempt to migrate to other countries for higher studies which might have a significant impact on the
overall
economy as both the problems are
very
much interlinked.

Many
economists and renowned former politicians suggest the following 5 practices that can
help
India to address these
challenges. 1
. Central
Government
of India should work
closely
with their State counterparts to understand the gaps in the
education
system and deploy a committee to drive awareness of
education
among the
people
.

2. The
government
should
periodically
review the progress of their initiatives once every quarter and take necessary steps to refine the process.

3. Sanction more funds to develop the
education
infrastructure such as upgrading school buildings, adapt interactive learning methods, increase the scholarships for the eligible candidates etc.

4. To address the
challenges
with regards to
population, the Indian
Government
should handle campaigns to drive family planning awareness among the public.

5. Draw census records once every two years to assess the growth based on accurate numbers
rather
than working on estimates on a pro-rate basis.

While central cabinet has already
started
drafting plans to address these
challenges
, public surveys appeal the prime minister to incorporate the above 5 suggestions into their action plan.

In conclusion
, although we may not
see
the results pouring down from day one, at least we should
see
a steady improvement and more robust outcomes in the long run.
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IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 3

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