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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.14

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 14
In most countries, eating fast food is common nowadays. Eating too much of this type of food can affect people’s health badly. Governments can help to stop this by imposing higher prices on these foods. I tend to disagree with this statement because I believe it is a personal choice. To start with, it is easy to disagree with this view for several reasons. First of all, people choose what they want to eat and what they do not want to eat. Eating healthy food can be easy if people really want to do it. For instance, if someone works Monday-Friday, from 9 am to 6 pm, just having 1hr for lunch they can bring their lunch to work. They can cook their own food at home on the weekend, saving it in the fridge for the whole week. This is cheaper than buying fast food every day and more convenient. If it is difficult to cook at home, another option could be to buy healthy food at restaurants that serve salads, meats and sandwiches. In this way, they are caring for their health, not choosing to eat junk food every day. It is important to mention that exercise contributes to being healthy. On the other hand, governments can impose higher taxes on this kind of food, but people will continue eating it. People who love to eat this type of food will buy it no matter its price. Maybe, imposing higher taxes can encourage people to eat less, however, this will not stop everyone, especially those who love fast food. Overall, eating junk food decreases the health of the population. Governments can impose higher prices on this type of food but it can not obligate people to stop eating this. People should care for their health, deciding not to eat this type of food but if they decide to eat junk food, the government has no right to make them stop.
In most countries,
eating
fast
food
is common nowadays.
Eating
too much of this
type
of
food
can affect
people’s
health
badly
.
Governments
can
help
to
stop
this by imposing higher prices on these
foods
. I tend to disagree with this statement
because
I believe it is a personal choice.

To
start
with, it is easy to disagree with this view for several reasons.
First of all
,
people
choose what they want to
eat
and what they do not want to
eat
.
Eating
healthy
food
can be easy if
people
really
want to do it.
For instance
, if someone works Monday-Friday, from 9 am to 6 pm,
just
having 1hr for lunch they can bring their lunch to work. They can cook their
own
food
at home on the weekend, saving it in the fridge for the whole week. This is cheaper than buying
fast
food
every day and more convenient. If it is difficult to cook at home, another option could be to
buy
healthy
food
at restaurants that serve salads, meats and sandwiches. In this way, they are caring for their
health
, not choosing to
eat
junk
food
every day. It is
important
to mention that exercise contributes to being healthy.

On the other hand
,
governments
can impose higher taxes on this kind of
food
,
but
people
will continue
eating
it.
People
who
love
to
eat
this
type
of
food
will
buy
it no matter its price. Maybe, imposing higher taxes can encourage
people
to
eat
less,
however
, this will not
stop
everyone,
especially
those who
love
fast
food.

Overall
,
eating
junk
food
decreases the
health
of the population.
Governments
can impose higher prices on this
type
of
food
but
it can not obligate
people
to
stop
eating
this.
People
should care for their
health
, deciding not to
eat
this
type
of
food
but
if they decide to
eat
junk
food
, the
government
has no right to
make
them
stop
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6
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