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In some areas of the US, a curfew was imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to go out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v.1

In some areas of the US, a curfew was imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to go out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 1
Recent promulgation of curfew for minors are observered in several US states. This current mandate has become a popular topic of discussion. In my point of view, although this imposition may potentially bear multitudes of problems, this however is a good practice to enforce that has massive positive implications. The parents would greatly benefit when a curfew for the youth will be established. Undoubtly, the world has evolved to become a cruel and dangerous place, especailly to the vulnerable population of the society that includes the teenagers. Late night partying and socialization that often leads to promiscuous and inappropriate actions. For instance, youth gatherings might involve drugs and large amounts of alcohol that is strictly prohibited but they somehow managed to curate illegally. In addition, intoxication is proven to alter and impair the mind, and thus accidents and crimes transpires. When this instances are irradicated, a huge amount of burden will be lifted, following this, a guardian's mind will be at ease. On the other hand, this might raise unecessary political arguements. Additional man power will be required to enforce such curfew. Moreover, this might solicit unfavorable responses from the youth, that would probably lead to protest or other rebellious actions. Essentially, this generation always wishes for freedom with nominal restrictions. In this regard, it might be a gruelling battle for the members of the federal committee to introduce such curfew. A myriad of aspects should be given consideration, as questions are arise, like what to in different circumstances such as emergency or lack of adult member in the family. Therefore, analysis and evaluation must be thoroughly done initially. All things considered, I advocate to this idea of setting a curfew for the youngsters during nightime. I reckon that positive results are far more valuable than its drawbacks.
Recent promulgation of
curfew
for minors are
observered
in several US states. This
current
mandate has become a popular topic of discussion. In my point of view, although this imposition may
potentially
bear multitudes of problems, this
however
is a
good
practice to enforce that has massive
positive
implications.

The parents would
greatly
benefit when a
curfew
for the youth will
be established
.
Undoubtly
, the world has evolved to become a cruel and
dangerous
place,
especailly
to the vulnerable population of the society that includes the
teenagers
. Late night partying and socialization that
often
leads to promiscuous and inappropriate actions.
For instance
, youth gatherings
might
involve drugs and large amounts of alcohol
that is
strictly
prohibited
but
they somehow managed to curate
illegally
.
In addition
, intoxication
is proven
to alter and impair the mind, and
thus
accidents and crimes transpires. When
this
instances are
irradicated
, a huge amount of burden will
be lifted
, following this, a guardian's mind will be at
ease
.

On the other hand
, this
might
raise
unecessary
political
arguements
. Additional
man
power will
be required
to enforce such
curfew
.
Moreover
, this
might
solicit unfavorable responses from the youth, that would
probably
lead to protest or other rebellious actions.
Essentially
, this generation always wishes for freedom with nominal restrictions. In this regard, it
might
be a
gruelling
battle for the members of the federal committee to introduce such
curfew
. A myriad of aspects should be
given
consideration, as questions are
arise
, like what to in
different
circumstances such as emergency or lack of adult member in the family.
Therefore
, analysis and evaluation
must
be
thoroughly
done
initially
.

All things considered, I advocate to this
idea
of setting a
curfew
for the youngsters during
nightime
. I reckon that
positive
results are far more valuable than its drawbacks.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew was imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to go out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 1

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