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In some areas of the Us, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after particular time at night unless they are accompanied by adults what is your opinion about this v.1

In some areas of the Us, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after particular time at night unless they are accompanied by adults what is your opinion about this v. 1
A Lockdown is popular with the public and many countries all over the world can impose it to solve many problems. At the beginning, the definition of a time limit is preventing people to go out of their doors after particular time at night. In fact, each local government has a right to impose a curfew, for example, almost all countries today impose strict restrictions and curfews to decrease the prevalence of Corona Virus. Unfortunately, in some cities in the US, a curfew is imposed on teenagers to be out of their doors unless they are accompanied by adults. Actually, I agree to some extent. From my point of view, a curfew is considered an effective tool to sort out many social, political or healthy disorders issues. Apparently, some cities in the US such as Chicago have a higher crime rate than others. This is a complex problem and the local government resorts to curfews to decrease their losses. Unfortunately, Shootings, robberies and many violent acts are very common in some areas in the US, therefore, they try to protect teenagers from that. Although, some teenagers are innocent victims, others are defendants. On the one hand, I assume that the US does a marvellous effort to protect teenagers, however, they are restricted by imposing a curfew. During a curfew, teenagers have a lack of freedom and their movements are connected to adults. On the other hand, this procedure can help governments protect their teenagers from dangers. Finally, we have respect the law which is established by our governments. Breaking the rules are not accepted, particularly, when countries' situations are difficult and their governments suffer from complex issues.
A Lockdown is popular with the public and
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many
countries all over the world can impose it to solve
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many
problems. At the beginning, the definition of a time limit is preventing
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people
to go out of their doors after particular time at night. In fact, each local
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government
has a right to impose a
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curfew
,
for example
, almost all countries
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today
impose strict restrictions and
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curfews
to decrease the prevalence of
The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona Virus
. Unfortunately, in
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some
cities in the US, a
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curfew
is imposed
on
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teenagers
to be out of their doors unless they
are accompanied
by adults. Actually, I
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agree
to
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some
extent.

From my point of view, a
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curfew
is considered
an effective tool to sort out
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many
social, political or healthy disorders issues.
Apparently
,
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some
cities in the US such as Chicago have a higher crime rate than others. This is a complex problem and the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
resorts to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
curfews
to decrease their losses. Unfortunately, Shootings, robberies and
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many
violent acts are
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very
common in
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some
areas in the US,
therefore
, they try to protect
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teenagers
from that. Although,
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some
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teenagers
are innocent victims, others are defendants.

On the one hand, I assume that the US does a
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marvellous
effort to protect
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teenagers
,
however
, they
are restricted
by imposing a
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curfew
. During a
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curfew
,
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teenagers
have a lack of freedom and their movements
are connected
to adults.
On the other hand
, this procedure can
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help
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governments
protect their
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teenagers
from
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dangers
.

Finally
, we have respect the law which
is established
by our
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governments
. Breaking the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
are not
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accepted
,
particularly
, when countries' situations are difficult and their
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governments
suffer from complex issues.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some areas of the Us, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after particular time at night unless they are accompanied by adults what is your opinion about this v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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