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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accomplained by an adult What is your opinion? v.32

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accomplained by an adult What is your opinion? v. 32
Nowadays, the crime rate has increased all over the world. Indeed, the late-night outside the house is not safe for teenagers, however, it is the responsibility of the officials to protect people. In my opinion, the government has to take necessary actions to stop violence rather than imposing a curfew on youngsters. In the present world, no one is secure either its children, or even adults. The unlawful act has risen from the past years, which shows how insecure is our surroundings. In India, for example, recent reports say that the violence against women has raised, in addition to that, it occurred mostly at midnight. This is the situations of most of the countries, where people fear to go out at dark. However, the government has the responsibility to take proper steps to handle such situations. There are different laws to protect as well as provide a peaceful life to the citizens, though the implementation and loopholes set the criminals free. For instance, there are lots of cases where the criminals release because they are underage when the crime is committed. The officials must do the needed to drop the crime rate and also assure the punishment for them. In conclusion, the parents get worried if their children were late to reach home at nightfall. However, the authorities are trying to make a secure world, but still not succeed. I believe, rather than, restricting youngsters to going outdoors at night, the ministry has to convert it into a peaceful place.
Nowadays, the crime rate has increased all over the world.
Indeed
, the late-night outside the
house
is not safe for
teenagers
,
however
, it is the responsibility of the officials to protect
people
. In my opinion, the
government
has to
take necessary actions to
stop
violence
rather
than imposing a curfew on youngsters.

In the present world, no one is secure either its children, or even adults. The unlawful act has risen from the past years, which
shows
how insecure is our surroundings. In India,
for example
, recent reports say that the violence against women has raised,
in addition
to that, it occurred
mostly
at midnight. This is the situations of most of the countries, where
people
fear to go out at dark.

However
, the
government
has the responsibility to take proper steps to handle such situations. There are
different
laws to protect
as well
as provide a peaceful life to the citizens, though the implementation and loopholes set the criminals free.
For instance
, there are lots of cases where the criminals release
because
they are underage when the crime
is committed
. The officials
must
do the needed to drop the crime rate and
also
assure the punishment for them.

In conclusion
, the parents
get
worried if their children were late to reach home at nightfall.
However
, the authorities are trying to
make
a secure world,
but
still
not succeed. I believe,
rather
than, restricting youngsters to going outdoors at night, the ministry
has to
convert it into a peaceful place.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accomplained by an adult What is your opinion? v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
8.5
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