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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this. v.31

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this. v. 31
It is often considered by some that youngsters should not be allowed to stay outside after dawn, while there are others who think that it is acceptable for teenagers to roam around at night if a guardian is accompanying them. In my opinion, I believe that such practices must be encouraged as teenage is a period where children can venture in the wrong direction, it becomes imperative to keep a close eye on them. Firstly, the reason to impose a curfew on children is due to the fact that parents are concerned about the safety and well being of their children. In other words, as young children are easily affected by a negative influence, the chance of them getting into bad habits increases. Secondly, during the daytime as a teenager is under the close supervision of a teacher at school, the negative forces come out at night and try to lure kids to indulge in bad habits such as rape, drugs and violence. Consequently, a child can also become a part of any evil practice, thereby putting their lives in danger. Another point to consider is that a young mind does not have the capability to distinguish between right and wrong. In other words, a child will learn what is taught to him. Moreover, under a wrong influence, a teenager will think that committing crime is acceptable, which might lead to dangerous consequences in future. To avoid such situations, parental interference becomes inevitable to impart the right knowledge to teenagers. To conclude, young minds have the potential to commit to a crime as well as the innocence to be a part of a crime. Therefore, it becomes the responsibility of the parents to accompany them as much as possible until they understand the true meaning of correct and incorrect.
It is
often
considered by
some
that youngsters should not be
allowed
to stay outside after dawn, while there are others who
think
that it is acceptable for
teenagers
to roam around at night if a guardian is accompanying them. In my opinion, I believe that such practices
must
be encouraged
as teenage is a period where
children
can venture in the
wrong
direction, it
becomes
imperative to
keep
a close eye on them.

Firstly
, the reason to impose a curfew on
children
is due to the fact that parents
are concerned
about the safety and
well being
of their
children
.
In other words
, as young
children
are
easily
affected
by a
negative
influence, the chance of them getting into
bad
habits increases.
Secondly
, during the daytime as a
teenager
is under the close supervision of a teacher at school, the
negative
forces
come
out at night and try to lure kids to indulge in
bad
habits such as rape, drugs and violence.
Consequently
, a child can
also
become
a part of any evil practice, thereby putting their
lives
in
danger
.

Another point to consider is that a young mind does not have the capability to distinguish between right and
wrong
.
In other words
, a child will learn what
is taught
to him.
Moreover
, under a
wrong
influence, a
teenager
will
think
that committing crime is acceptable, which might lead to
dangerous
consequences
in future
. To avoid such situations, parental interference
becomes
inevitable to impart the right knowledge to
teenagers
.

To conclude
, young minds have the potential to commit to a crime
as well
as the innocence to be a part of a crime.
Therefore
, it
becomes
the responsibility of the parents to accompany them as much as possible until they understand the true meaning of correct and incorrect.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this. v. 31

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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