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overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems. v.26

overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 26
Many people are moving from rural areas to urban areas and due to the overpopulation cities are facing many problems nowadays. This essay will discuss some of its serious issues and how government and individuals can solve them. Firstly, one of the main problems that cities are experiencing is pollution. As many families migrate for betterment, whether it be to improve their careers or their kids' education, cities are becoming densely populated because of it. Therefore, there are rare open areas where people can walk and breath a fresh air and because of overpopulation, the houses are usually built close to each other to fit as many people as it can take. This had led to serious medical conditions such as, Asthma and chronic heart diseases. Secondly, the roads are quite busy all the time and many accidents are happening, which cannot be avoided given the busy lifestyle of everyone. These are few of the many issues that seriously need to be addressed. To solve these problems, government and individual both need to take their responsibilities seriously. For instance, the higher management in the country should open better career plans for people living in the countryside. Standardised Hospitals, Schools and other facilities should be provided to them that promises a better future. It will eventually decrease the migration trend to urban areas. Also, the legal authorities should provide means of public transport such as buses and trains which reduces the traffic and pollution at the same time. Individuals should also consider using bicycles or public transport to help lower the pollution in their particular area and act like more responsible civilians. These measures will definitely help solve numerous problems in much better ways. In conclusion, urban areas due to their overpopulation have many depressing issues. Though, when tackled wisely by government and individuals, they can be solved in no time.
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are moving from rural
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to urban
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and due to the overpopulation cities are facing
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many
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problems
nowadays. This essay will discuss
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of its serious issues and how
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government
and
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individuals
can solve them.

Firstly
, one of the main
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problems
that cities are experiencing is pollution. As
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many
families migrate for betterment, whether it be to
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improve
their careers or their kids' education, cities are becoming
densely
populated
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because
of it.
Therefore
, there are rare open
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areas
where
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people
can walk and breath a fresh air and
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because
of overpopulation, the
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houses
are
usually
built close to each other to fit as
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many
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people
as it can take. This had led to serious medical conditions such as, Asthma and chronic heart diseases.
Secondly
, the roads are quite busy all the time and
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many
accidents are happening, which cannot
be avoided
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given
the busy lifestyle of everyone. These are few of the
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many
issues that
seriously
need to
be addressed
.

To solve these
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problems
,
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government
and
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individual
both need to take their responsibilities
seriously
.
For instance
, the higher management in the country should open better career plans for
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people
living in the countryside.
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Standardised
Hospitals, Schools and other facilities should
be provided
to them that promises a better future. It will
eventually
decrease the migration trend to urban
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areas
.
Also
, the legal authorities should provide means of public transport such as buses and trains which
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reduces
the traffic and pollution at the same time.
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Individuals
should
also
consider using bicycles or public transport to
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help
lower the pollution in their particular
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area
and act like more responsible civilians. These measures will definitely
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help
solve numerous
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problems
in much better ways.

In conclusion
, urban
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areas
due to their overpopulation have
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many
depressing issues. Though, when tackled
wisely
by
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government
and
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individuals
, they can
be solved
in no time.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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