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Nowadays many students live with their families while others go to another city to study at a university. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios. v.3

Nowadays many students live with their families while others go to another city to study at a university. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios. v. 3
In this contemporary world, tertiary education has become immensely popular. To pursue higher studies, several students start living in a new city, whereas some students still stay with their families. Both options of living have some benefits and shortcomings, which will be discussed in this essay. Living with a family has some clear advantages that make it the prime choice for students around the world. Pupils can properly concentrate on their studies as they need not participate in different household activities such as grocery, cleaning and paying utility bills. Being free from such household chores allows the students to allocate more time in studies which is likely to result in higher academic grades. However, the distance between the family residence and the university may become the major problem for staying with family. Statistics suggest that 80% of university students in the USA enrolled form distant cities or countries. If those students chose to continue their education from home, it would be impossible for them to find a standard educational institution at hometown. On the other hand, shifting to a new place for education tends to have some benefits. Students can learn many life skills when living alone, which help them prosper in their professional life. With such self-dependent citizens, a country is likely to achieve its optimum growth backed by its human capital. Nevertheless, difficulty to maintain the remaining living costs appeared to be as a threat to living alone in a new city for education. As a result, many students need to engage in a part-time job to keep up their residential expenses at the cost of their study time. Poor academic grades, dropouts are some of the instances arise from shifting in another city. In summary, both of the living methods of university students have some pros and cons. Therefore, students should select their living options cautiously to avoid or minimize the disadvantages
In this contemporary world, tertiary
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education
has become
immensely
popular. To pursue higher
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studies
, several
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students
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start
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living
in a new city, whereas
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some
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students
still
stay with their
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families
. Both options of
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living
have
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some
benefits and shortcomings, which will
be discussed
in this essay.

Living with a
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family
has
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some
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clear
advantages that
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make
it the prime choice for
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students
around the world. Pupils can
properly
concentrate on their
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studies
as they need not participate in
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different
household activities such as grocery, cleaning and paying utility bills. Being free from such household chores
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allows
the
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students
to allocate more time in
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studies
which is likely to result in higher academic grades.
However
, the distance between the
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family
residence and the university may become the major problem for staying with
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family
. Statistics suggest that 80% of university
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students
in the USA enrolled form distant cities or countries. If those
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students
chose to continue their
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education
from home, it would be impossible for them to find a standard educational institution at hometown.

On the other hand
, shifting to a new place for
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education
tends to have
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some
benefits.
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Students
can learn
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many
life
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skills
when
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living
alone, which
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help
them prosper in their professional life. With such self-dependent citizens, a country is likely to achieve its optimum growth backed by its human capital.
Nevertheless
, difficulty to maintain the remaining
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living
costs appeared to be as a threat to
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living
alone in a new city for
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education
.
As a result
,
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many
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students
need to engage in a part-time job to
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keep
up their residential expenses at the cost of their
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study
time. Poor academic grades, dropouts are
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some of the
instances arise from shifting in another city.

In summary, both of the
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living
methods of university
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students
have
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some
pros and cons.
Therefore
,
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students
should select their
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living
options
cautiously
to avoid or minimize the disadvantages
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many students live with their families while others go to another city to study at a university. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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