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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v.22

Due to curfew imposed in certain parts of the US, teenagers are only allowed to step outside their home if an adult accompanies them. In my opinion, there are areas that are prone to terror through sudden gunfire, kidnappings, and murder. Under such circumstances, the government has to take certain measures in order to restrict the adversities of these attacks which mostly occur at night. Stranded immigrants tend to attack young loners in look for money or any valuable item. In a recent article in The Times, an incident was put to light, where a high school student was robbed while he was cycling in the park after sunset. Similar stories have been reported in many cities like Mexico, Texas, and Nevada. Some reports have been so horrific with teenagers being beaten with sticks and hockey during the lieu hour of the day, which have forced the states to impose curfew after sunset. Furthermore, there have been reports of terrorist attacks in certain cities with open gunfire in public places. Last year, four young children from San Francisco were killed while they were returning from a friend’s place at around 7 PM. This led to public protests around multiple police stations in the city seeking justice. Thus, to curtail such inhumane attacks in the future, a ruling was passed in the supreme court that a teenager must be accompanied by an adult after sunset in areas where curfew has been imposed. To conclude, terror is most active after sunset which leaves teenagers exposed to acts of crime such as kidnappings, theft, robbery, gunfire, and murder. Thus, imposing a curfew in such cities can help limit its occurrence with teenagers allowed to be outdoors only if an adult accompanies them.
Due to
curfew
imposed in certain parts of the US,
teenagers
are
only
allowed
to step outside their home if an adult accompanies them. In my opinion, there are areas that are prone to terror through sudden gunfire, kidnappings, and murder. Under such circumstances, the
government
has to
take certain measures in order to restrict the adversities of these
attacks
which
mostly
occur at night.

Stranded immigrants tend to
attack
young loners in look for money or any valuable item. In a recent article in The Times, an incident
was put
to light, where a high school student
was robbed
while he was cycling in the park after sunset. Similar stories have
been reported
in
many
cities
like Mexico, Texas, and Nevada.
Some
reports have been
so
horrific with
teenagers
being beaten
with sticks and hockey during the lieu hour of the day, which have forced the states to impose
curfew
after sunset.

Furthermore
, there have been reports of terrorist
attacks
in certain
cities
with open gunfire in public places. Last year, four young children from San Francisco
were killed
while they were returning from a friend’s place at around 7 PM. This led to public protests around multiple police stations in the city seeking justice.
Thus
, to curtail such inhumane
attacks
in the future, a ruling
was passed
in the supreme court that a
teenager
must
be accompanied
by an adult after sunset in areas where
curfew
has
been imposed
.

To conclude
, terror is most active after sunset which
leaves
teenagers
exposed to acts of crime such as kidnappings, theft, robbery, gunfire, and murder.
Thus
, imposing a
curfew
in such
cities
can
help
limit its occurrence with
teenagers
allowed
to be outdoors
only
if an adult accompanies them.
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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