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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v.21

In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 21
It is very well known that in countries like USA, most of the crimes take place at night and the children must not be allowed to be outside their homes after getting darkened as they are vulnerable to abandonment, pornography, kidnapping, drug abuse and harassment etc. Which can ruin their whole lives. Protecting children in this manner would be favourable for the society and it would reduce the burden of children on their parents. The importance of restricting the roads for teenagers is worth discussing for both parents and children. From small age, kids must be given the knowledge of why there are limitations in their lives until they are at least 18 years so that they get adopted to live under the protection of their adults. I saw a recent news item where a teenage boy had been asked to come out by his best friend who was a member of a gang of thugs in the area and had used to transport drugs to a night club where the boy had been harassed by the club owner again. A few hours later, the police has involved in rescuing his life. If there was not any chance for teens to roam around, the incident could have been avoided. The story here shows that Imposing curfew is an effective method to avoid our children getting exposed to crimes. Nowadays, most of the parents in the society reveal how bothersome to keep their kids under control. As a school teacher, I have had to solve the problems between children and parents several times. Once one parent came to me saying that her only son had been addicted to drugs due to the company of bad friends of his football team who got together late evenings. That time I felt how easier for us to keep children safe if curfew was being imposed. The safest place for a child is under the roof of his or her own when the outside environment is not suitable to deal with. At night, curfew must be imposed for teenagers unless they are accompanied by an adult to reduce the risk of exposing to unexpected dangerous situations.
It is
very
well known that in countries
like USA
, most of the crimes take place at night and the
children
must
not be
allowed
to be outside their homes after getting darkened as they are vulnerable to abandonment, pornography, kidnapping, drug abuse and harassment etc.
Which
can ruin their whole
lives
. Protecting
children
in this manner would be
favourable
for the society and it would
reduce
the burden of
children
on their
parents
. The importance of restricting the roads for
teenagers
is worth discussing for both
parents
and children.

From
small
age, kids
must
be
given
the knowledge of why there are limitations in their
lives
until they are at least 18 years
so
that they
get
adopted to
live
under the protection of their adults. I
saw
a recent news item where a teenage boy had
been asked
to
come
out by his best friend who was a member of a gang of thugs in the area and had
used
to transport drugs to a night club where the boy had
been harassed
by the club owner again. A few hours later, the police has involved in rescuing his life. If there was not any chance for teens to roam around, the incident could have
been avoided
. The story here
shows
that Imposing curfew is an effective method to avoid our
children
getting exposed to crimes.

Nowadays, most of the
parents
in the society reveal how bothersome to
keep
their kids under control. As a school teacher, I have had to solve the problems between
children
and
parents
several times.
Once
one
parent
came to me saying that her
only
son had
been addicted
to drugs due to the
company
of
bad
friends of his football team who
got
together late evenings. That time I felt how easier for us to
keep
children
safe if curfew was
being imposed
.

The safest place for a child is under the roof of
his or her
own
when the outside environment is not suitable to deal with. At night, curfew
must
be imposed
for
teenagers
unless they
are accompanied
by an adult to
reduce
the
risk
of exposing to unexpected
dangerous
situations.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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    Present relevant ideas
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