Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v.19

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 19
Nowadays, it is a controversial debate between parents and youngers about is it safe to allow them to stay out late or they should have supervised by an adult from particular hours. In my opinion, although we should consider their independence, parents have significant responsibility for them. On the one hand, parents should give their youngsters a sense of responsibility and self–reliance to give them a great experience of standing alone. Furthermore, they cannot always have control of them and try to force their sense of anxiety on them. In my experience, when I was a teenager, I always wanted to prove my parents that I have the ability to protect myself and one of my way to accomplishing this goal was that I stayed out until late. Therefore, the family should respect their youngsters to feel free and have a sense of responsibility. On the other hand, if teenagers are accompanied by an adult, they are less likely to be approached by criminals. This protects them from many evils. Also, the parent or guardian who accompanies the children can keep a tab on their activities and warn them when they cross the limits. In conclusion, this ‘curfew’ that prevents teens from going out of their home alone at late night is beneficial for them and protects them from crime and bad company. Since teenagers are too young to understand what is right or wrong, they need the care and protection of an adult when they are in vulnerable circumstances.
Nowadays, it is a controversial debate between
parents
and
youngers
about is it safe to
allow
them to stay out
late or
they should have supervised by an adult from particular hours. In my opinion, although we should consider their independence,
parents
have significant responsibility for them.

On the one hand,
parents
should give their youngsters a sense of responsibility and
self–reliance
to give them a great experience of standing alone.
Furthermore
, they cannot always have control of them and try to force their sense of anxiety on them. In my experience, when I was a
teenager
, I always wanted to prove my
parents
that I have the ability to protect myself and one of my way to accomplishing this goal was that I stayed out until late.
Therefore
, the family should respect their youngsters to feel free and have a sense of responsibility.

On the other hand
, if
teenagers
are accompanied
by an adult, they are less likely to
be approached
by criminals. This protects them from
many
evils.
Also
, the
parent
or guardian who accompanies the children can
keep
a tab on their activities and warn them when they cross the limits.

In conclusion
, this ‘curfew’ that
prevents
teens from going out of their home alone at late night is beneficial for them and protects them from crime and
bad
company
. Since
teenagers
are too young to understand what is right or
wrong
, they need the care and protection of an adult when they are in vulnerable circumstances.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts