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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion. v.11

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion. v. 11
In some parts of the United States, Parents prevent their adolescents of staying out late at night. That said, they should be at home before a specific time, except when they are out with their adults. I agree with this statement because of health and safety issues. As we know, our body is growing between ages 13 and 19, so our adolescents should be learning to eat, sleep and exercise in such a way that help their body to grow as well as possible. Therefore, one of the issues that parents shall manage is the teenagers’' sleeping time. Actually, if they are allowed to stay out late at night, it might disrupt their sleeping time schedule, so they couldn't sleep well and enough at night which might lead to harmful effects on their health. So in my opinion, it is better to set a particular time, so that teenagers reach home at night before it. Another reason for supporting my idea is that, almost all criminals are gathered together at night, especially late at night, so the teenagers might be lured by them which might change their future and their fate. So again, I believe that, it is better to encourage the teenagers to be at home before a specific time at night. Some people might say that, this statement is kind of restriction and could be stressor and might induce negative feelings to the teenagers. Actually by making the environment of the home positive, teenagers appeal to come to the home early at night without any pressure and stress. In conclusion, I think that the curfew, which is imposed in some states of US is a good law, because teenagers can grow healthier and also be safer next to their parents.
In
some
parts of the United States, Parents
prevent
their adolescents of staying out late at
night
. That said, they should be at home
before
a specific
time
, except when they are out with their adults. I
agree
with this statement
because
of health and safety issues.

As we know, our body is growing between ages 13 and 19,
so
our adolescents should be learning to eat, sleep and exercise in such a way that
help
their body to grow
as well
as possible.
Therefore
, one of the issues that parents shall manage is the
teenagers
’' sleeping
time
. Actually, if they are
allowed
to stay out late at
night
, it
might
disrupt their sleeping
time
schedule,
so
they couldn't sleep well and
enough
at
night
which
might
lead to harmful effects on their health.
So
in my opinion, it is better to set a particular
time
,
so
that
teenagers
reach home at
night
before
it.

Another reason for supporting my
idea
is that, almost all criminals
are gathered
together at
night
,
especially
late at
night
,
so
the
teenagers
might
be lured
by them which
might
change
their future and their fate.
So
again, I believe that, it is better to encourage the
teenagers
to be at home
before
a specific
time
at night.

Some
people
might
say that, this statement is kind of restriction and could be stressor and
might
induce
negative
feelings to the
teenagers
. Actually by making the environment of the home
positive
,
teenagers
appeal to
come
to the home early at
night
without any pressure and
stress
.

In conclusion
, I
think
that the curfew, which
is imposed
in
some
states of US is a
good
law,
because
teenagers
can grow healthier and
also
be safer
next
to their parents.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion. v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
6
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