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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? v.5

In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? v. 5
Subject choice is very significant in school and university life. A multiplicity of girls selects the department of arts while a host of boys study in science. The prime reasons may be gender inequality and pervasive superstitions. I believe that in further, the proclivity will no longer exist and both sexes will be identical to admitting in science as we are living in the modern age. A great deal of discriminations is still in our society. The first inconsistency may be gender disparity which leads women to admit in the arts. For some, girls are redundant to study science because it is difficult to fathom and girls do not have the incentives to grab it strictly. So, females are forced to continue academic curriculum as arts students. As our society is full of preposterous affairs, as a result, boys are motivated to be scientific pupils because they seem that only male students can do something for the country and their forte is higher than fair sexes. For instance, in Bangladesh, prior to this year, few girls are permitted to select technological subjects because social and parental barriers. On the other hand, the penchant has little feasibility to alive us within a few years. People are more judicious and shrewd than the past and comprehend that both genders should be provided identical conveniences. Furthermore, to cope up with the technology-operated world, both parents and society are reclaiming their infallibilities concerning making girls scientists. Afterwards, they arrange a wide variety of free seminars to make individuals understand regarding the importance of being a scientist. For example, a couple of months ago, the government of Bangladesh decided to have women to read immune to charge if they study in any technological institution. Therefore, statistics demonstrated, noteworthy girls admitted in some scientific department. In conclusion, the essay elaborated that choosing arts by girls and modern subjects by boys is a combination of existing gender discrimination and superstitions and the essay also put forward evidences as to why after a couple of years, the tendency will never display. I believe, various substantial steps should be taken to solve the tendency.
Subject choice is
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very
significant in school and university life. A multiplicity of
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girls
selects the department of
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arts
while a host of boys study in science. The prime reasons may be gender inequality and pervasive superstitions. I believe that in
further
, the proclivity will no longer exist and both sexes will be identical to admitting in science as we are living in the modern age.

A great deal of discriminations is
still
in our society. The
first
inconsistency may be gender disparity which leads women to admit in the
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arts
. For
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some
,
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girls
are redundant to study science
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because
it is difficult to fathom and
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girls
do not have the incentives to grab it
strictly
.
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So
, females
are forced
to continue academic curriculum as
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arts
students. As our society is full of preposterous affairs,
as a result
, boys
are motivated
to be scientific pupils
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because
they seem that
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only
male students can do something for the country and their forte is higher than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
sexes.
For instance
, in Bangladesh, prior to this year, few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
are permitted
to select technological subjects
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
social and parental barriers.

On the other hand
, the penchant has
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little
feasibility to alive us within a few years.
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People
are more judicious and shrewd than the past and comprehend that both genders should
be provided
identical conveniences.
Furthermore
, to cope up with the technology-operated world, both parents and society are reclaiming their
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infallibilities
concerning making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
scientists. Afterwards, they arrange a wide variety of free seminars to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
individuals understand regarding the importance of being a scientist.
For example
, a couple of months ago, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of Bangladesh decided to have women to read immune to charge if they study in any technological institution.
Therefore
, statistics demonstrated, noteworthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
admitted in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
scientific department.

In conclusion
, the essay elaborated that choosing
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arts
by
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girls
and modern subjects by boys is a combination of existing gender discrimination and superstitions and the essay
also
put forward evidences as to why after a couple of years, the tendency will never display. I believe, various substantial steps should
be taken
to solve the tendency.
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IELTS essay In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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