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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e. g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e. g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree? v.4

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e. g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e. g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? v. 4
Undoubtedly, this era could be called as the lady age, and the females are getting their right steadily, surly it differs from a county to other but generally speaking the equality with the men aren’t a dream like before specially in the Arabic world, but the question: do we have to interfere in the choices of the both genders regarding their education is a controversial one and I am going to discus it in this essay Firstly we have to admit that not all the humans have the same skills and intellectual capabilities and therefore not all the students should do the scientific or literature topics and rather it is not smoothing related to the sex of the scholars, furthermore the grades are the tickets to allow anyone getting into college, for instance in Lebanon if you want to apply for the medicine university you need an average in high school equal or more than 98. 5% and for the engineering 98% regardless of your origin or gender To conclude with some Arabic countries aren’t allowing their daughters or sisters to apply for specific types of education like nursing, and they consider it dishonor, surely this kind of practice has to stopped immediately and this is a special case and not a general behavior otherwise I see that the things has to be equal for both gender and both of them may study whatever they like as long as they have the required key factors for this learning
Undoubtedly
, this era could
be called
as the lady age, and the females are getting their right
steadily
, surly it differs from a county to other
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but
generally
speaking the equality with the
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men
aren’t a dream like
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before
specially
in the Arabic world,
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but
the question: do we
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have to
interfere in the choices of the both genders regarding their education is a controversial
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one and
I am going to discus it in this essay

Firstly
we
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have to
admit that not all the humans have the same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and intellectual capabilities and
therefore
not all the students should do the scientific or literature topics and
rather
it is not smoothing related to the sex of the scholars,
furthermore
the grades are the tickets to
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allow
anyone
The pronoun 'anyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "gets", "got".
getting
into college,
for instance
in Lebanon if you want to apply for the medicine university you need an average in high school equal or more than 98. 5% and for the engineering 98% regardless of your origin or gender

To conclude
with
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some
Arabic countries aren’t allowing their daughters or sisters to apply for specific types of education like nursing, and they consider it dishonor,
surely
this kind of practice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
immediately and this is a special case and not a general behavior
otherwise
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that the things
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
be equal for both gender and both of them may study whatever they like as long as they have the required key factors for this learning
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e. g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e. g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? v. 4

Essay
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247 words
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