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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? v. 3
In educational centres like schools and colleges, females are most likely to select arts while males prefer science. There are several reasons for this preference and this must change. Girls are often viewed as creative thinkers. They love the freedom of expression gained through art. For example: a fashion designer or interior designer is best recommended if it is a woman. In the current scenario, closed homes and society dictate their lives. Numbers don't usually entertain the feminine counterparts. Art is an amalgamation of history, civics, and logic all rolled into one. These subjects are familiar since the time of schooling. The similarity of material studied previously makes it a preferable choice. On the contrary, mathematics with formulas is exciting according to the boys. Careers like that of an engineer and, doctor are lucrative options for men. For example: sports like football, rugby, and boxing are male dominated games. The countless hours of solving an equation are an adventure for them. The field of science has many honorary options for an interesting future. For an individual, fame is crucial at some point in life, which need not always be obtained by the entertainment industry it can also be obtained by knowledge. In families with a generation of doctors, the next male is prepared from birth to follow the path. Hence, more males opt for science. Although, this trend must change as it is in today's world. There has been a switch as boys are heading for the art stream while quite a few girls are opting for the science stream.
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centres
like schools and colleges, females are most likely to select
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arts
while
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males
prefer science. There are several reasons for this preference and this
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Girls are
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often
viewed as creative thinkers. They
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love
the freedom of expression gained through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
.
For example
: a fashion designer or interior designer is best recommended if it is a woman. In the
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current
scenario, closed homes and society dictate their
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lives
. Numbers don't
usually
entertain the feminine counterparts.
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Art
is an amalgamation of history, civics, and logic all rolled into one. These subjects are familiar since the time of schooling. The similarity of material studied previously
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makes
it a preferable choice.

On the contrary
, mathematics with formulas is exciting according to the boys. Careers like that of an engineer and, doctor are lucrative options for
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men
.
For example
: sports like football, rugby, and boxing are male dominated games. The countless hours of solving an equation are an adventure for them. The field of science has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
honorary options for an interesting future. For an individual, fame is crucial at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point in life, which need not always
be obtained
by the entertainment industry it can
also
be obtained
by knowledge. In families with a generation of doctors, the
next
male
is prepared
from birth to follow the path.
Hence
, more
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males
opt for science.

Although, this trend
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must
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change
as it is in
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today
's world. There has been a switch as boys are heading for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
stream while quite a few girls are opting for the science stream.
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IELTS essay In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
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