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In some countries, the government prioritises economic growth above other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion v.1

In some countries, the government prioritises economic growth above other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion v. 1
It is argued that in some nations, the governing bodies / authorities give priority to economic growth as compared to the other concerns. While the main advantage of this approach is better living standards, I believe that it can affect health and education of the general public. The primary advantage of prioritizing economic growth is that it can improve living standards and reduce the poverty rate. In other words, high average incomes enable consumers to enjoy more goods and services and a better lifestyle. This means that people will have more income that will eventually reduce the poverty rate. For example, a recent report published by BBC suggested that economic growth in the twentieth century was a major factor in reducing absolute levels of poverty and enabling a rise in life expectancy. However, economic growth alone will not suffice. Health and education are equally important. The major drawback of prioritizing economic growth is that it can have a negative impact on the environment. China, for example, is growing rapidly. Unfortunately, this is at the expense of the environment. The air quality is China is perhaps the lowest in the world. Fast growing Indian cities are no different. While economic growth is good, the resultant pollution can affect the health of the people. It can also destroy wildlife. Another issue is that when nations try too hard to grow financially, culture and morality may take a hit. In conclusion, although prioritizing economic growth is beneficial because it increases the living standards and reduces the poverty rate, I believe that it has a negative impact on the environment and health of people.
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is argued
that in
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some
nations, the governing bodies / authorities give priority to
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economic
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growth
as compared to the other concerns. While the main advantage of this approach is better living standards, I believe that it can affect
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health
and education of the
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general public
.

The primary advantage of prioritizing
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economic
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growth
is that it can
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improve
living standards and
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reduce
the
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poverty
rate.
In other words
, high average incomes enable consumers to enjoy more
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goods
and services and a better lifestyle. This means that
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people
will have more income that will
eventually
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reduce
the
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poverty
rate.
For example
, a recent report published by BBC suggested that
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economic
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growth
in the twentieth century was a major factor in reducing absolute levels of
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poverty
and enabling a rise in life expectancy.

However
,
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economic
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growth
alone will not suffice.
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Health
and education are
equally
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important
. The major drawback of prioritizing
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economic
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growth
is that it can have a
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negative
impact on the environment. China,
for example
, is growing
rapidly
. Unfortunately, this is at the expense of the environment. The air quality is China is perhaps the lowest in the world.
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Fast
growing Indian cities are no
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different
. While
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economic
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growth
is
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good
, the resultant pollution can affect the
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health
of the
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people
. It can
also
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destroy
wildlife. Another issue is that when nations try too
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hard
to grow
financially
, culture and morality may take a hit.

In conclusion
, although prioritizing
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economic
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growth
is beneficial
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because
it increases the living standards and
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reduces
the
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poverty
rate, I believe that it has a
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negative
impact on the environment and
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health
of
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people
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, the government prioritises economic growth above other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
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