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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.2

In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? 2
In the last decade, many countries have undergone development in its economic sector, but this often takes place in some parts of the country, usually the cities, leaving the rural areas lagging behind, resulting in an increase in the standard of living in cities compared to the towns and villages. This essay will discuss some problems associated with this and will also suggest solutions that might lessen the situation. Problems associated with selected cities having a high living standard compared to others are obvious and numerous. Nevertheless, only two main problems will be discussed here today. First, people tend to migrate to places with high living standard because this is directly proportional to better infrastructures, better opportunities, effective and efficient transportation as well as high skill demand. Often, people will leave their villages to the cities for these reasons, leaving the villages deserted and cities are, in turn, being over-populated, over congested and over polluted. For example, Lagos State is the most populated state in Nigeria due to its better infrastructures and cosmopolitan nature. Second, when people migrate in search of better opportunities, they pay taxes to their new city of residence. Consequently, the villages with reduced living standard are unable to generate internal income. Thus, the problems associated with selected higher living standard in a country are an insufficient generation of internal revenue in the villages and over-population in the cities. There are ways this issue can be alleviated. To start with, the authorities should issue a policy that every individual must reside in his/her state of origin. Hence, skilled workers are forced to migrate back and companies will be forced to establish branches in villages because these skills are no more concentrated in a particular region. In addition, the government should enforce all states to uniformly distribute their generated revenues so that no state will be indigent. For instance, a government policy was passed two decades ago, in Australia when faced with a similar situation. A survey was taken recently and this shows that the standard of living was uniform across the states within the country. In conclusion, the economy of many countries has developed in the past years. However, often times, only the cities experience high living standard leading to numerous problems in the nation. This write-up discussed these problems which include lower internal revenue and increased population. This write-up also suggested two solutions that can mitigate these problems which are government policies with regard to immigration and equal distribution of revenue amongst regions.
In the last decade,
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have undergone development in its economic sector,
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takes place in
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, leaving the rural areas lagging behind, resulting in an increase in the
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compared to the towns and
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. This essay will discuss
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some
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problems
associated with this and will
also
suggest solutions that might lessen the situation.

Problems associated with selected
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cities
having a
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high
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living
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standard
compared to others are obvious and numerous.
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,
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two main
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,
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tend to migrate to places with
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standard
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because
this is
directly
proportional to
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better
infrastructures,
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better
opportunities, effective and efficient transportation
as well
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high
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skill
demand.
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,
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people
will
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their
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villages
to the
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cities
for these reasons, leaving the
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villages
deserted and
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cities
are, in turn, being over-populated, over congested and over polluted.
For example
, Lagos
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State
is the most populated
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state
in Nigeria due to its
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better
infrastructures and cosmopolitan nature. Second, when
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people
migrate in search of
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better
opportunities, they pay taxes to their new city of residence.
Consequently
, the
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villages
with
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reduced
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living
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standard
are unable to generate internal income.
Thus
, the
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problems
associated with selected higher
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living
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standard
in a
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country
are an insufficient generation of internal
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revenue
in the
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villages
and over-population in the cities.

There are ways this issue can
be alleviated
. To
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start
with, the authorities should issue a policy that every individual
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must
reside in his/her
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state
of origin.
Hence
, skilled workers
are forced
to migrate back and
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companies
will
be forced
to establish branches in
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villages
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because
these
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skills
are no more concentrated in a particular region.
In addition
, the
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government
should enforce all
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states
to
uniformly
distribute their generated
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revenues
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so
that no
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state
will be indigent.
For instance
, a
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government
policy
was passed
two decades ago, in Australia when faced with a similar situation. A survey
was taken
recently and this
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shows
that the
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standard
of
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living
was uniform across the
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states
within the country.

In conclusion
, the economy of
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many
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countries
has developed in the past years.
However
,
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often
times,
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the
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cities
experience
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high
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living
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standard
leading to numerous
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problems
in the nation. This write-up discussed these
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problems
which include lower internal
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revenue
and increased population. This write-up
also
suggested two solutions that can mitigate these
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problems
which are
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government
policies with regard to immigration and equal distribution of
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revenue
amongst regions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
417 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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