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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v.13

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v. 13
It is believed that the best way to solve traffic issues is by giving high rate tax for private motor vehicle owners, and the fund could be allocated for improving public transportation systems and facilities. The solution has its own positive and negative sides and the following essay will discuss them in details. For a number of reasons, charging personal car owners with high tax rate with high tax rate and allocate the fund for improving and developing public transportation brings a lot of benefits for the society. It is undeniable that with the high tax rate, the number of car owners will gradually decrease and traffic congestion problem would slowly decline. As a result, people could commute faster work more effective and efficient and air pollution would be reduced. Besides that, the collected tax fund could be used to improve and manage public transportation, as a lot of people would change their mode of transportation from personal cars into public transportation. For example, the government could replace all the old subway trains and buses with the new ones which consume fuel efficiently and more comfortable for passengers. Consequently, the budget for public transportation fuel could be reduced and public transportation user would feel comfort in using the facilities. On the other hand, taxing private car owners heavily have some negative sides for the individual and the society. Firstly, many people live in areas which are not covered by public transportation, such as those who lived in rural areas or countryside. Should there be any public buses or trains that pass through that areas, the schedule might be only once or twice in a day. These people need private cars and if the tax for motorised vehicles is raised significantly then it would be a big burden and problem for them. Secondly, it is a fact that automotive industries have absorbed so many employments. As the demand for motor vehicle decreases due to the high tax rate, many automobile companies would reduce their employment number. As a consequence, the country's unemployment rate would be high. In conclusion, the solution of charging private car owner with high vehicle tax rate to reduce traffic problems has its own benefits and drawbacks. The advantages of the solution are that people could travel faster and air pollution would be reduced. However, the disadvantages of it are that it would become a big problem for those who lived in remote areas since public transports are rarely reaching them and also cause unemployment issue.
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that the best way to solve traffic issues is by giving
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rate
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tax
for
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vehicle
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owners
, and the fund could
be allocated
for improving
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public
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transportation
systems and facilities. The solution has its
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positive
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sides and the following essay will discuss them in
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details
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For a number of reasons, charging personal
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car
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owners
with
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high
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tax
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rate
with
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high
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rate
and allocate the fund for improving and developing
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public
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transportation
brings
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a lot of
benefits for the society. It is undeniable that with the
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high
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tax
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rate
, the number of
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car
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owners
will
gradually
decrease and traffic congestion
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problem
would
slowly
decline.
As a result
,
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people
could commute faster work more effective and efficient and air pollution would be
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reduced
.

Besides
that, the collected
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fund could be
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used
to
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improve
and manage
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public
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transportation
, as
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a lot of
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people
would
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change
their mode of
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transportation
from personal
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cars
into
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public
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transportation
.
For example
, the
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government
could replace all the
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old
subway trains and buses with the new ones which consume fuel
efficiently
and more comfortable for passengers.
Consequently
, the budget for
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public
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transportation
fuel could be
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reduced
and
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public
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transportation
user would feel comfort in using the facilities.

On the other hand
, taxing
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private
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car
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owners
heavily
have
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some
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negative
sides for the individual and the society.
Firstly
,
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people
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live
in
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areas
which are not covered by
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public
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transportation
, such as those who
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lived
in rural
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areas
or countryside. Should there be any
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public
buses or trains that pass through that
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areas
, the schedule might be
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only
once or twice in a day. These
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people
need
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private
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cars
and if the
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for
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motorised
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vehicles
is raised
significantly
then it would be a
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burden and
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for them.
Secondly
, it is a fact that automotive industries have absorbed
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employments. As the demand for motor
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vehicle
decreases due to the
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high
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tax
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,
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automobile
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companies
would
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reduce
their employment number. As a consequence, the country's unemployment
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rate
would be high.

In conclusion
, the solution of charging
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car
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owner
with
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vehicle
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to
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reduce
traffic
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problems
has its
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own
benefits and drawbacks. The advantages of the solution are that
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people
could travel faster and air pollution would be
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reduced
.
However
, the disadvantages of it are that it would become a
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for those who
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in remote
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since
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public
transports are rarely reaching them and
also
cause unemployment issue.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
70Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
418 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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