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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution and give your own opinion? v.12

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution and give your own opinion? v. 12
Traffic congestion in many cities around the world is severe. One possible solution to this problem is to impose heavy taxation on car drivers. Then this money can be used to improve public transport. However, I believe that this explication could be unfair to some people. One of the first benefits of such a measure is that the excessive taxes would discourage car owners from using their cars because it would become very expensive to drive. This would mean that more people would make use of public transport, and thus reducing traffic congestion and pollution as well. Moreover, if the revenue obtained is used to update bus system and trains, more citizens will be encouraged to abandon driving their private vehicles. It is often the case that public transport in cities is very poor. For example, we often see old buses and trains that people would rather not use. High taxes would generate enough money to make the necessary changes. Nevertheless, there are drawbacks to such a solution. First and foremost, this would be an added burden on car drivers. At present, taxes are already high for a lot of people, and so further taxes would only mean less income at the end of the month for most people who may have no choice but to drive every day. In addition, this type of tax would likely be set at a fixed amount. This would mean that it would hit those with less money harder, whilst the rich could likely afford it. It is therefore not a fair tax. To conclude, this solution is worth considering to improve the current situation, but there are advantages and disadvantages of introducing such a policy. Hence, careful consideration should be taken before implementing this strategy.
Traffic congestion in
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many
cities around the world is severe. One possible solution to this problem is to impose heavy taxation on
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car
drivers. Then this money can be
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used
to
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improve
public transport.
However
, I believe that this explication could be unfair to
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some
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people
.

One of the
first
benefits of such a measure is that the excessive
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taxes
would discourage
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car
owners from using their
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cars
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because
it would become
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very
expensive to drive. This would mean that more
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people
would
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make
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use
of public transport, and
thus
reducing traffic congestion and pollution
as well
.
Moreover
, if the revenue obtained is
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used
to update bus system and trains, more citizens will
be encouraged
to abandon driving their private vehicles. It is
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often
the case that public transport in cities is
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very
poor.
For example
, we
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often
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see
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old
buses and trains that
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people
would
rather
not
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use
. High
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taxes
would generate
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enough
money to
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make
the necessary
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changes
.

Nevertheless
, there are drawbacks to such a solution.
First
and foremost, this would be an
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added
burden on
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car
drivers. At present,
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taxes
are already high for
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a lot of
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people
, and
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so
further
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taxes
would
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mean less income at the
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end
of the month for most
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people
who may have no choice
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but
to drive every day.
In addition
, this type of
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tax
would likely
be set
at a
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fixed
amount. This would mean that it would hit those with less money harder, whilst the rich could likely afford it. It is
therefore
not a
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fair
tax.

To conclude
, this solution is worth considering to
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improve
the
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current
situation,
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but
there are advantages and disadvantages of introducing such a policy.
Hence
, careful consideration should
be taken
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before
implementing this strategy.
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IELTS essay In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution and give your own opinion? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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