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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v.17

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v. 17
These days congested traffics in developing nations has made lots of environmental issues such as air and sound pollution and governments have taken different strategies to tackle this problem. Undeniably increasing tax on private car owners and investing more in public transport systems are the most considerable ways which government have performed in most of the countries to control the traffic  but it is essential to investigate both of negative and positive aspects of mentioned policies and applying other solutions to reduce  the number of traffic on our blue planet. However, people will not use their own cars in most of the time when they must pay more taxes or insurance money and it can influence the number of traffic in each residential area, in some occasions, it directly affects the economy of a country. In other words, if the tax on the private car would be increased, prices of other goods would be raised and it makes people under pressure. On the other hand, policies should allow people to have a better life while adding costs for using a private car stand against this human right. Also, some governments have tried to improve transport system by developing under ways and increasing the numbers of buses and trains which are appreciated and has had a deep effect on traffic issues, especially in mega cities. While this strategy is a very good solution but perhaps allocating some part of transport system budget to develop freeways would be a fundamental solution as people can use their own cars without making traffics. I think, therefore, not only should governments limit societies to use private cars as the best solution for traffic problem, but they should try to make a situation which allows anyone to use his own car without worries about spending more money as the tax. Perhaps other steps would be taken beside boosting public transportation or getting tax on using own cars.
These days congested
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traffics
in developing nations has made lots of environmental issues such as air and sound pollution and
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governments
have taken
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different
strategies to tackle this problem.
Undeniably
increasing
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tax
on
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private
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car
owners and investing more in public transport systems are the most considerable ways which
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government
have performed in most of the countries to control the traffic
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but
it is essential to investigate both of
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negative
and
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positive
aspects of mentioned policies and applying
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other
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solutions
to
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reduce
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the number of
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traffic
on our blue planet.

However
,
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people
will not
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use
their
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own
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cars
in most of the time when they
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must
pay more
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taxes
or insurance money and it can influence the number of
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traffic
in each residential area, in
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some
occasions, it
directly
affects the economy of a country. In
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other
words, if the
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tax
on the
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private
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car
would
be increased
, prices of
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other
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goods
would
be raised
and it
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makes
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people
under pressure. On the
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other
hand, policies should
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allow
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people
to have a better life while adding costs for using a
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private
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car
stand against this human right.

Also
,
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some
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governments
have tried to
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improve
transport system by developing under ways and increasing the numbers of buses and trains which
are appreciated
and has had a deep effect on
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traffic
issues,
especially
in mega cities. While this strategy is a
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very
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good
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solution
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but
perhaps allocating
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some
part of transport system budget to develop freeways would be a fundamental
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solution
as
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people
can
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use
their
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own
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cars
without making traffics.

I
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think
,
therefore
, not
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only
should
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governments
limit societies to
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use
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private
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cars
as the best
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solution
for
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traffic
problem,
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but
they should try to
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make
a situation which
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allows
anyone to
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use
his
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own
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car
without worries about spending more money as the
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tax
. Perhaps
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other
steps would
be taken
beside boosting public transportation or getting
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tax
on using
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own
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cars
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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