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In order to reduce crime we need to attack the causes of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities It is not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people in prison To what extend do you agree or disagree with this v.3

In order to reduce crime we need to attack the causes of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities It is not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people in prison with this v. 3
There are various ways to cut the number of crime. The common way, a traditional one, believe that the crime can be reduced by putting more police on public area and jailed if any offender. Alternative solutions come from modern thinker which site that attacking the poverty and lack of Education ask the source of criminal is the best solution. Who is right they' re a traditionalist or modernist? People in preference thorough reduction in the number of crime by increasing the police officer often argue that the number of police will not end the problem. Crime in public space is usually as the result of social challenge. Poverty has a big potential to turn people to be a thief because it related to the availability of food which is the basic need of human being and poverty may also as the result of lack of Education. Because there is no chance in education there is no chance to improve wealthiness. On the other hand, placing more police in the public area is right because the police can directly tackle any crime in there. Moreover the police duty, it' s not only cached and jailed the offender but also to make society abiding the law. In the case of any accident on the street, they can also become the first one who helped the victims. People will feel safer if any police around them. To sum up, I agree that attacking the poverty and lack of education can have an important role in helping to reduce crime, yet direct watched the society by the police also meaningful too. Crime sometimes is not just about offender intentions but also any opportunity to do so.
There are various ways to
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cut
the number of
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crime
. The common way, a traditional one, believe that the
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crime
can be
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reduced
by putting more
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police
on public area and jailed if any offender. Alternative solutions
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come
from modern thinker which site that attacking the
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poverty
and lack of
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Education
ask the source of criminal is the best solution. Who is right
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#039; re a traditionalist or modernist?

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People
in preference thorough reduction in the number of
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crime
by increasing the
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police
officer
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often
argue that the number of
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police
will not
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end
the problem.
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Crime
in public space is
usually
as the result of social challenge.
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Poverty
has a
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big
potential to turn
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people
to be a thief
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because
it related to the availability of food which is the basic need of human being and
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poverty
may
also
as the result of lack of
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Education
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
there is no chance in
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education
there is no chance to
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improve
wealthiness.

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, placing more
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police
in the public area is right
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because
the
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police
can
directly
tackle any
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crime
in there.
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Moreover
the
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police
duty,
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it&
#039; s not
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only
cached and jailed the offender
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but
also
to
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make
society abiding the law. In the case of any accident on the street, they can
also
become the
first
one who
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helped
the victims.
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People
will feel safer if any
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police
around them.

To sum up, I
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agree
that attacking the
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poverty
and lack of
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education
can have an
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important
role in helping to
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reduce
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crime
,
yet
direct
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watched
the society by the
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police
also
meaningful too.
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Crime
The adverb 'sometimes' usually goes after the verb 'is'.
sometimes is
not
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just
about offender intentions
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but
also
any opportunity to do
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so
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to reduce crime we need to attack the causes of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities It is not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people in prison with this v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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