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Studies show that many people in the prison have low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree. v.1

Studies show that many people in the prison have low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. v. 1
Research on criminals around the world shows that they seriously lack education. Due to this reason, some people think that educating prisoners before releasing them will not only curb crime in society but also get them job opportunities. In my opinion, though teaching criminals is a good idea, it eventually depends on their attitude to take this as a golden chance to live happily outside the prison. Many prisoners end up in jail, not because of the weight of the crime they committed in their life, but due to the wrong choice in some mishap. In other words, people who are serving a sentence for a crime, which was committed for a necessity, such as a robbery at supermarkets for food or chain-snatching for clearing debt, are more likely to participate in receiving education and upgrade their lifestyle when they get released. For instance, In India, many prisoners completed their undergraduate inside the cell and now have started earning a basic salary in blue-collar jobs. However, there are some other destructive mindsets in the lockups, who are habitual criminals and non-cooperative in running such educational policies inside. These prisoners conspicuously have numerous crimes registered on them, therefore, having no convergence or tolerance to such intention. Several studies have consistently found that people who are accused of any critical offense often have a direct relationship with an immediate or past criminal history. For this reason, forming any policies to educate them will suffice nothing but disposal of money. In conclusion, while delivering education to the criminals and expecting a positive transformation in their life after their release is a generous and mindful thought, willingness to learn and constructive mindset of the person is required to achieve education success.
Research on
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criminals
around the world
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shows
that they
seriously
lack
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education
. Due to this reason,
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some
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people
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think
that educating
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prisoners
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before
releasing them will not
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only
curb
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crime
in society
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but
also
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get
them job opportunities. In my opinion, though teaching
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criminals
is a
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good
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idea
, it
eventually
depends on their attitude to take this as a golden chance to
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live
happily
outside the prison.

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Many
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prisoners
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end
up in jail, not
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because
of the weight of the
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crime
they committed in their life,
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but
due to the
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wrong
choice in
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some
mishap.
In other words
,
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people
who are serving a sentence for a
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crime
, which
was committed
for a necessity, such as a robbery at supermarkets for food or chain-snatching for clearing debt, are more likely to participate in receiving
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education
and upgrade their lifestyle when they
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get
released.
For instance
, In India,
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many
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prisoners
completed their undergraduate inside the cell and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
have
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started
earning a basic salary in blue-collar jobs.

However
, there are
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some
other destructive mindsets in the lockups, who are habitual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
and non-cooperative in running such educational policies inside. These
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prisoners
conspicuously
have numerous
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crimes
registered on them,
therefore
, having no convergence or tolerance to such intention. Several studies have
consistently
found that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
are accused
of any critical offense
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
have a direct relationship with an immediate or past
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criminal
history.
For this reason
, forming any policies to educate them will suffice nothing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
disposal of money.

In conclusion
, while delivering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
and expecting a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
transformation in their life after their release is a generous and mindful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
, willingness to learn and constructive mindset of the person
is required
to achieve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
success.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Studies show that many people in the prison have low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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