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In most universities students focus on specialized subjects, however some people believe that universities should encourage student to study a wide spectrum of subjects. To what extent you agree or disagree? Give your opinion v.1

In most universities students focus on specialized subjects, however some people believe that universities should encourage student to study a wide spectrum of subjects. Give your opinion v. 1
In the past few years, the crime rate around the world has increased so alarmingly such that criminals are found committing not only physical crimes but also digital or cybercrimes. Although few people consider it is government’s responsibility to avoid crimes, some think one should be self-sufficient to defend oneself. This essay will debate why it is everyone’s responsibility to protect themselves rather than depending on external forces alone. Government should take various measures to reduce crime rate. It is their prime duty to save their citizens and make sure they stay true to the trust endowed upon them by the common man. For instance, government can deploy more police on the ground who will be patrolling the streets. Another way is, police administration can have several helpline numbers where citizens can report a crime. As a result, for such cases an on-the-spot team will be ready for quick action. Although respective governing authority will take such steps to avoid crimes, it is of prime importance that we take care of ourselves. We can avoid most of the crimes by being alert of our surroundings. For example, we should report immediately if we see unidentified luggage in public places. We should be aware of our surroundings and report any suspicious activity around us. We should have the physical strength to defend ourselves by learning various mechanisms such as karate, martial arts etc. To conclude the discussion, I would like to say that, it is eminent that we need both government intervention for crime avoidance and self-awareness to protect oneself. But, in my opinion, it is absolutely necessary to be self-sufficient to safeguard oneself. Hence, I believe we must train ourselves physically and mentally to protect ourselves, which is indeed our responsibility.
In the past few years, the
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crime
rate around the world has increased
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so
alarmingly
such that criminals
are found
committing not
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only
physical
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crimes
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but
also
digital or
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cybercrimes
. Although few
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people
consider it is
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government
’s responsibility to avoid
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crimes
,
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some
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think
one should be self-sufficient to defend oneself. This essay will debate why it is everyone’s responsibility to protect themselves
rather
than depending on external forces alone.

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Government
should take various measures to
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reduce
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crime
rate. It is their prime duty to save their citizens and
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make
sure they stay true to the trust endowed upon them by the common
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man
.
For instance
,
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government
can deploy more police on the ground who will be patrolling the streets. Another way is, police administration can have several helpline numbers where citizens can report a
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crime
.
As a result
, for such cases an on-the-spot team will be ready for quick action.

Although respective governing authority will take such steps to avoid
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crimes
, it is of prime importance that we take care of
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ourselves
. We can avoid most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
by being alert of our surroundings.
For example
, we should report immediately if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
unidentified luggage in public places. We should be aware of our surroundings and report any suspicious activity around us. We should have the physical strength to defend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ourselves
by learning various mechanisms such as karate, martial arts etc.

To conclude
the discussion, I would like to say that, it is eminent that we need both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
intervention for
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crime
avoidance and self-awareness to protect oneself.
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But
, in my opinion, it is
absolutely
necessary to be self-sufficient to safeguard oneself.
Hence
, I believe we
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must
train
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ourselves
physically
and mentally to protect
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ourselves
, which is
indeed
our responsibility.
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IELTS essay In most universities students focus on specialized subjects, however some people believe that universities should encourage student to study a wide spectrum of subjects. Give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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