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Narrator Now listen to a conversation between two students on campus. Male student Hi. . . good morning. Could you help me with something? Female student Um. Maybe. What’s up? Male student Well, I’m a first-year student. Female student Everything going O v.1

Narrator Now listen to a conversation between two students on campus. Male student Hi. . . good morning. Could you help me with something? Female student Um. Maybe. What’s up? Male student Well, I’m a first-year student. Female student Everything going O v. 1
Universities are essential in the life of most people today. It helps us learn about a lot of interesting things as well as securing a good career for us. Nowadays, universities have many healthy and educational activities and facilities. This essay will explore why universities must fund its sports facilities the same as they do in their libraries. First, there aren’t many sports activities in universities. There should be more competitive activities like tennis, swimming and horse riding. These types of sports may seem expensive, but they are indeed important because they keep students fit and healthy. Traditional sports camps like football, baseball or basketball are not enough. At my hometown’s university, for example, has only a football camp. Second, sports activities help students to relax after studying. A good amount of play is not only good physically, but also mentally. After long hours of lectures, students would be tired, and some play would help to relieve the stress of study. Besides, when students relax this way, they have better chances of studying better because a lot of continuing studies will certainly make students bored. In conclusion, I find that it’s really important for universities to give the same money and support to sports facilities and activities as they would give to the libraries for several reasons. These reasons include that there aren’t many sports activities and sport, helping students to relax and finally that there should always be some balance in the funding of different facilities.
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Universities
are essential in the life of most
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people
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today
. It
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helps
us learn about
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a lot of
interesting things
as well
as securing a
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good
career for us. Nowadays,
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universities
have
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many
healthy and educational
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activities
and facilities. This essay will explore why
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universities
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must
fund its
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sports
facilities the same as they do in their libraries.

First
, there aren’t
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many
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sports
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activities
in
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universities
. There should be more competitive
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activities
like tennis, swimming and horse riding. These types of
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sports
may seem expensive,
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but
they are
indeed
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important
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they
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keep
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students
fit and healthy. Traditional
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sports
camps like football, baseball or basketball are not
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enough
. At my hometown’s
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university
,
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only
a football camp.

Second,
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activities
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help
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students
to relax after studying. A
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good
amount of play is not
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only
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good
physically
,
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but
also
mentally. After long hours of lectures,
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students
would
be tired
, and
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some
play would
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help
to relieve the
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stress
of study.
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, when
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students
relax this way, they have better chances of studying better
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because
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a lot of
continuing studies will
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make
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students
bored.

In conclusion
, I find that it’s
really
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for
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universities
to give the same money and support to
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sports
facilities and
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activities
as they would give to the libraries for several reasons. These reasons include that there aren’t
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many
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sports
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activities
and
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sport
, helping
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students
to relax and
finally
that there should always be
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some
balance in the funding of
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different
facilities.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Narrator Now listen to a conversation between two students on campus. Male student Hi. . . good morning. Could you help me with something? Female student Um. Maybe. What’s up? Male student Well, I’m a first-year student. Female student Everything going O v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
247 words
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7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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