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In most countries disabled people are not catered adequately, e. g. buildings are often inappropriately designed. Governments rely heavily on charities and voluntary organizations to provide assistance and funding. v.1

In most countries disabled people are not catered adequately, e. g. buildings are often inappropriately designed. Governments rely heavily on charities and voluntary organizations to provide assistance and funding. v. 1
Nowadays, there is not any fitting circumstance for disabled people in order to dwell as others in almost all countries. Unfortunately, manifold buildings are, in the aggregate, erected inappropriately. Sometimes governments are becoming contingent on charities and voluntary organizations to supply aid and funding. Actually, it is not a lucid reason and I do not concur with this notion. To ameliorate the disabled people’s lifestyle is one of the most noteworthy duties of a desirable statement. Sometimes the government can confront to some financial and economical problems which can afflict persons' conditions. Despite it, anyway, there must be some organizations that assist to people in these challenges. Meanwhile, as bad luck would have it, in society there are not enough better places for the disabled’s confidence. For instance, when they want to enter the buildings or supermarkets, they suffer from it because of the structure of complexes. On the other hand, they need much money for living better. Because they must buy some facilities in order to move and it is an omnipresent knowledge that such kind of equipment is very expensive. Hence, in this situation, disabled people must be provisioned with the apparatuses or supplementary money that is affordable for buying them. It seems to me that there are many impeccable solutions in order to deal with this tremendous issue in the world. The governments should impose some rules about the opening  factories that disabled people can work. Apart from salary, it will help them in terms of both boosting their morale via making a connection with new people and aiding them to attain to the ecstasy. In addition, in all public places, the existence of particular pass can be very beneficial to disabled people and the applying of it can support them in most cases. In my view, these attitudes must be implemented in all countries.
Nowadays, there is not any fitting circumstance for
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disabled
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people
in order to dwell as others in almost all countries. Unfortunately, manifold buildings are, in the aggregate, erected
inappropriately
.
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Sometimes
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governments
are becoming contingent on charities and voluntary organizations to supply aid and funding.

Actually, it is not a lucid reason and I do not concur with this notion. To ameliorate the
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disabled
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people’s
lifestyle is one of the most noteworthy duties of a desirable statement.
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Sometimes
the
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government
can confront to
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some
financial and
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economical
problems which can afflict persons' conditions. Despite it, anyway, there
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must
be
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some
organizations that assist to
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people
in these challenges. Meanwhile, as
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bad
luck would have it, in society there are not
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enough
better places for the
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disabled’s
confidence.
For instance
, when they want to enter the buildings or supermarkets, they suffer from it
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because
of the structure of complexes.

On the other hand
, they need much money for living better.
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Because
they
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must
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buy
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some
facilities in order to
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move
and it is an omnipresent knowledge that such kind of equipment is
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very
expensive.
Hence
, in this situation,
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disabled
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be provisioned
with the apparatuses or supplementary money
that is
affordable for buying them.

It seems to me that there are
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many
impeccable solutions in order to deal with this tremendous issue in the world. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should impose
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some
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rules
about the opening
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factories that
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disabled
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people
can work. Apart from salary, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in terms of both boosting their morale via making a connection with new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and aiding them to attain to the ecstasy.
In addition
, in all public places, the existence of particular pass can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beneficial to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disabled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and the applying of it can support them
in most cases
. In my view, these attitudes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be implemented
in all countries.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In most countries disabled people are not catered adequately, e. g. buildings are often inappropriately designed. Governments rely heavily on charities and voluntary organizations to provide assistance and funding. v. 1

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