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In modern times young adults spending more time with their friends and less time with family. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home? v.1

In modern times young adults spending more time with their friends and less time with family. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home? v. 1
Attitude of teenagers has been changed a lot since the past decade. Recently, more and more teenagers prefer to be with their friends rather than their family. This essay will discuss the reasons why has this change occurred and provide solutions for how parents can handle this situation. The generation gap is the main reason behind this change. While in old generation teenagers used to spend more time with their family, the current generation prefer to be with their friends because of their freedom with their friends. They can share anything with their friends. Attitude of teenagers has been changed a lot since the past decade. Recently, more and more teenagers prefer to be with their friends rather than their family. This essay will discuss the reasons why has this change occurred and provide solutions for how parents can handle this situation. The generation gap is the main reason behind this change. While in old generation teenagers used to spend more time with their family, the current generation prefer to be with their friends because of their freedom with their friends. They can share anything with their friends. Attitude of teenagers has been changed a lot since the past decade. Recently, more and more teenagers prefer to be with their friends rather than their family. This essay will discuss the reasons why has this change occurred and provide solutions for how parents can handle this situation. The generation gap is the main reason behind this change. While in old generation teenagers used to spend more time with their family, the current generation prefer to be with their friends because of their freedom with their friends. They can share anything with their friends.
Attitude of
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teenagers
has been
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changed
a lot since the past decade. Recently, more and more
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teenagers
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prefer
to be with their
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friends
rather
than their
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family
. This essay will discuss the
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reasons
why has this
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change
occurred and provide solutions for how parents can handle this situation.

The generation gap is the main
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reason
behind this
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change
. While in
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old
generation
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teenagers
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used
to spend more time with their
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family
, the
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current
generation
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prefer
to be with their
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friends
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because
of their freedom with their
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friends
. They can share anything with their friends.

Attitude of
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teenagers
has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
a lot since the past decade. Recently, more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to be with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
rather
than their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
. This essay will discuss the
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reasons
why has this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
occurred and provide solutions for how parents can handle this situation.

The generation gap is the main
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reason
behind this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
. While in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
generation
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teenagers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to spend more time with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
generation
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prefer
to be with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their freedom with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
. They can share anything with their friends.

Attitude of
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teenagers
has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
a lot since the past decade. Recently, more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to be with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
rather
than their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
. This essay will discuss the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
why has this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
occurred and provide solutions for how parents can handle this situation.

The generation gap is the main
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reason
behind this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
. While in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
generation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to spend more time with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
generation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to be with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their freedom with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
. They can share anything with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In modern times young adults spending more time with their friends and less time with family. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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