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All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement? v.1

All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grades. to this statement? v. 1
Learning a foreign language is very useful nowadays because all of ministries and companies really need the person who can speak, read, listen and write in other languages. Many people believe that enrolling their children to the English or other language school can help their children more clever and it might help them in the future. In our world, there are more than 4000 languages that have spoken by different natives or countries. But there are the top 5 languages that have been spoken by a lot of people in the world such as English, French, Mandarin, Hindi, Spanish. A large number of individuals consider that most of parents nowadays like to enrol their children to English school or Mandarin school. The numerous of schools also increase from days to days. Most of them are English and Mandarin school. For instance, in Cambodia, the number of students enrolled in young ages in the English school has more than 10000 students a year. It keeps increasing every year. However, it was said that enrolling the children in the foreign language school in the early grades might affect their children's native language. This could count as a concern too, because nowadays we can see that some of children cannot speak their native language at all. There are other people think if we want to enrol our children to another language school, we should make them learn their native language first. In conclusion, parents should let their children study another accent, but they also have to be aware about their children as if they can speak their native language yet. It might be easier if they study abroad but it will cause them the consequences if they can't speak their own language in own country. In my opinion, I think that enrolling your children to foreign language school is a good choice, but we should let them learn their own language first.
Learning a foreign
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language
is
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very
useful nowadays
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because
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all of ministries
and
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companies
really
need the person who can
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speak
, read, listen and write in other
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languages
.
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people
believe that enrolling their
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children
to the English or other
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language
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school
can
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help
their
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children
more clever and it might
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help
them in the future.

In our world, there are more than 4000
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languages
that have spoken by
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different
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natives
or countries.
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there are the top 5
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languages
that have
been spoken
by
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a lot of
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people
in the world such as English, French, Mandarin, Hindi, Spanish.
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individuals consider that
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most of parents
nowadays like to enrol their
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children
to English
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school
or Mandarin
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school
.
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schools
also
increase from days to days. Most of them are English and Mandarin
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school
.
For instance
, in Cambodia, the number of students enrolled in young ages in the English
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school
has more than 10000 students a year. It
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keeps
increasing every year.

However
, it
was said
that enrolling the
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children
in the foreign
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language
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school
in the early grades might affect their children's
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native
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language
. This could count as a concern too,
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because
nowadays we can
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see
that
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some
of
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children
cannot
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speak
their
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native
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language
at all. There are other
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people
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think
if we want to enrol our
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children
to another
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language
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school
, we should
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make
them learn their
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native
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language
first
.

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, parents should
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let
their
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children
study another accent,
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they
also
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have to
be aware about their
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children
as if they can
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speak
their
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native
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language
yet
. It might be easier if they study abroad
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but
it will cause them the consequences if they can't
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speak
their
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own
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language
in
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own
country. In my opinion, I
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think
that enrolling your
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children
to foreign
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language
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school
is a
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good
choice,
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we should
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let
them learn their
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own
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language
first
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grades. to this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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