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In many Western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children for study what are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v.1

In many Western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children for study what are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v. 1
Western countries following and open culture where people have the freedom to make decisions in their life. Nowadays, in several Western nations a lot of couples prefer to have no kids. This is a will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having no children. To begin with, the foremost benefit is that the partners can spend their life as per their interest. Usually, parents should have a great responsibility to rear and care offsprings. Thus, avoiding the responsibility as parents provide enough time for couples to share their own life. For example, in the present era, many partners determined to avoid parenting and tend to travel to tourist destinations. In addition to that, this type of choice enables lovers to earn enough income for them. Otherwise they should work hard to spend for their children in all their needs. On the contrary, deciding to have no children might affect the later life miserable because always being with kids make a perfect family. Therefore, couples may regret in their old age without proper support and care from loved ones. For example, it is the responsibility of the young people to look after the parents during the late period. Since, sometimes childless parents feel disappointment about their conclusion. Furthermore, it is common that many couples who plans to live without children for into loneliness and depression after years first top most of the time the men feel uncomfortable than the women. To conclude former as like a coin has both sides the choice of child free life has advantages such as financial stability and freedom. The disadvantage is the depression and regret at the old age.
Western countries following and open culture where
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people
have the freedom to
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make
decisions in their
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life
. Nowadays, in several Western nations
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a lot of
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couples
prefer to have no kids. This is a will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having no children.

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begin
with, the foremost benefit is that the partners can spend their
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life
as per their interest.
Usually
,
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parents
should have a great responsibility to rear and care
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offsprings
.
Thus
, avoiding the responsibility as
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parents
provide
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enough
time for
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couples
to share their
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own
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life
.
For example
, in the present era,
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many
partners determined to avoid parenting and tend to travel to tourist destinations.
In addition
to that, this type of choice enables lovers to earn
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enough
income for them.
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Otherwise
they should work
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hard
to spend for their children in all their needs.

On the contrary
, deciding to have no children might affect the later
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life
miserable
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because
always being with kids
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make
a perfect family.
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,
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couples
may regret in their
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old
age without proper support and care from
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loved
ones.
For example
, it is the responsibility of the young
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people
to look after the
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parents
during the late period.
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Since
,
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sometimes
childless
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parents
feel disappointment about their conclusion.
Furthermore
, it is common that
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many
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couples
who
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plans
to
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live
without children for into loneliness and depression after years
first
top most of the time the
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men
feel
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uncomfortable
than the women.

To conclude
former as like a coin has both sides the choice of child free
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life
has advantages such as financial stability and freedom. The disadvantage is the depression and regret at the
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old
age.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many Western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children for study what are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
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