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In many Western countries, there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v.6

In many Western countries, there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v. 6
It is irrefutable, majority of masses think that boarding schools are the best choice for children, whereas others think that it is not good, because of some reasons. However, this essay will discuss both sides and before reach a conclusion. There are some reasons why some people find that boarding schools are good for students. First and foremost cause is that children boost their confidence when they staying at boarding schools. To put it simply, if children living on their own, then they can enhance their confidence. For instance, my cousins, who have been studied from boarding school since their childhood and they are extremely confidential. Therefore, this is perhaps the reason why some parents give more preference to boarding school for their offspring. On the other hand, it is not good in some ways. Moreover, children facing numerous problems when they live in boarding schools. As a reason, some time children face financial problems and some time children feel home sickness due to the absence of parents. In this condition, they do not give concentrate on own study and many children choose bad habits like some children starts taking drugs and some doing suicide. For example, my friend, who studied from boarding school and he chose a few bad habits like he started taking drugs. Thus, some people disagree with this viewpoint. To summarize, although boarding schools are good in some ways. But there are some disadvantages of boarding schools like homesick, choosing bad habits. After though analysis on this subject, it is predicted that many children will adopt such type of bad habits when they will do a study in boarding schools.
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children
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IELTS essay In many Western countries, there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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