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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v.119

A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v. 119
All around the world, museums and art galleries have always played a very important role in educating people. While some people believe these places are no longer needed due to the availability of historical information on computers, I completely disagree with this statement. Although advancement of information technology has made data readily available to the public, I believe it cannot provide the full experience of being in a museum or in an art gallery. For instance, it is near to impossible to explain our historical values to our children if they have not seen any object or artefact in real life, because they will not be able to relate to any physical object which can make them realise its existence in real life despite seeing images on a computer screen. In addition, museums and art galleries have always been places for tourist attraction and computer technology has played a positive role in marketing these places. Viewing historical objects and artefacts on a computer screen makes it more desirable to visit the place and observe such items in close proximity. For example, tourists visiting Sydney usually visit New South Wales Art Gallery because they usually have already seen the related information on the internet and they want a hands on experience. In conclusion, I believe, despite the fact that information is readily available on the internet, it does not impact the importance and status of museums and art galleries and such places will continue to operate, whereas I believe information has worked as a marketing medium for these places.
All around the world,
museums
and
art
galleries
have always played a
very
important
role in educating
people
. While
some
people
believe
these
places
are no longer needed due to the availability of historical
information
on computers, I completely disagree with this statement.

Although advancement of
information
technology has made data
readily
available to the public, I
believe
it cannot provide the full experience of being in a
museum
or in an
art
gallery
.
For instance
, it is near to impossible to
explain
our historical values to our children if they have not
seen
any object or
artefact
in real life,
because
they will not be able to relate to any physical object which can
make
them
realise
its existence in real life despite seeing images on a computer screen.

In addition
,
museums
and
art
galleries
have always been
places
for tourist attraction and computer technology has played a
positive
role in marketing these
places
. Viewing historical objects and
artefacts
on a computer screen
makes
it more desirable to visit the
place
and observe such items in
close proximity
.
For example
, tourists visiting Sydney
usually
visit New South Wales
Art
Gallery
because
they
usually
have already
seen
the related
information
on the
internet and
they want a hands on experience.

In conclusion
, I
believe
, despite the fact that
information
is
readily
available on the internet, it does not impact the importance and status of
museums
and
art
galleries
and such
places
will continue to operate, whereas I
believe
information
has worked as a marketing medium for these
places
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v. 119

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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