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In many parts of the world water sources are becoming more polluted. discuss the problems and the solutions? v.2

In many parts of the world water sources are becoming more polluted. discuss the problems and the solutions? v. 2
Water, which is vital part of our existence, is contaminated due to reckless waste dumping straight into water resources. Long-term polluting has own negative impact on environment which I' m going to reduce in this essay. Probably the most noteworthy damage inflicted to marine habitat because of humans' ignorance. Dolphins, fishes are dyeing in row due to lack of oxygen and pureness that was not trained only few centuries ago. Second notable detrimental aftermath is disruption of food chain and forest habitat loss. From mammals to predators in wildlife cannot drink river or lake water because reservoir became a dump. Finally, we can see how diseases become more frequent these days. Turning to possible solutions, supervise the place where factory releases their remains should occur and government should demand a report with signature to make sure in safety of country water. Another measure we can give is fellow citizens' about trained water in a long run. That would probably prevent exacerbation by either deliberate or unconscious dropping litter in rivers and lakes because some people might think that their garbage would not cause a global issue. It will not indeed but this is only matter of number of like-minded humans. Finally, animals that are close to extinction could be put under surveillance by green collars and volunteers, who would be checking near water on cleanness. In conclusion, contamination of water which is caused by absence of official reports and mankind' s ignorance perhaps could be countered by government authorities. Reminding the essentially of pure water to country residents an entering a special need to know each landfill used by factories should be provided.
Water
, which is vital part of our existence,
is contaminated
due to reckless waste dumping straight into
water
resources. Long-term polluting has
own
negative
impact on environment which
I&
#039; m going to
reduce
in this essay.

Probably
the most noteworthy damage inflicted to marine habitat
because
of
humans&
#039; ignorance. Dolphins, fishes are dyeing in row due to lack of oxygen and pureness that was not trained
only
few centuries ago. Second notable detrimental aftermath is disruption of food chain and forest habitat loss. From mammals to predators in wildlife cannot drink river or lake
water
because
reservoir became a dump.
Finally
, we can
see
how diseases become more frequent these days.

Turning to possible solutions, supervise the place where factory releases their remains should occur and
government
should demand a report with signature to
make
sure in safety of country
water
. Another measure we can give is fellow
citizens&
#039; about trained
water
in a long run. That would
probably
prevent
exacerbation by either deliberate or unconscious dropping litter in rivers and lakes
because
some
people
might
think
that their garbage would not cause a global issue. It will not
indeed
but
this is
only
matter of number of like-minded humans.
Finally
, animals that are close to extinction could
be put
under surveillance by green collars and volunteers, who would be checking near
water
on cleanness.

In conclusion
, contamination of
water
which
is caused
by absence of official reports and
mankind&
#039; s ignorance perhaps could
be countered
by
government
authorities. Reminding the
essentially
of pure
water
to country residents an entering a special need to know each landfill
used
by factories should
be provided
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world water sources are becoming more polluted. discuss the problems and the solutions? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
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