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Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.7

Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. v. 7
In recent times, we can observe that globalization is at its peak; so keeping updates of our own surroundings as well as at the international level is becoming a need. Many people perceive that teaching current affairs to high school pupils is wastage of their time; whereas, another group of people supports this notion. In my opinion, students must be aware of and know the importance of happenings in the world at the present time in a way that is not harmful to them. Firstly, learning international affairs at high school level will develop an interest at the young age in students, so that they can decide if they want to pursue their career in this field or not? Secondly, being informed with the current situation of the world; they might take steps at a smaller scale to reduce the particular issue. For example, global warming is an issue of great importance; students can create awareness campaigns in their schools, family, communities etc. , to plant more and more trees in their surroundings. When the subject and its content is properly reviewed and taught by the tutors; it can have a positive influence on the students. On the other hand, many people do not support the idea of teaching global news at the secondary level. According to them, students are already burdened; as modern education is getting tougher day by day, due to the competitive environment. Furthermore, exposing students at an early stage to the harsh and brutal news can impact their thinking and can create a negative image of the world. Rather than revealing the news which is not 100% authentic and has detrimental effects, students should be encouraged in activities which helps them in their education. The news channels most of the times will run any information for the rating without analyzing its effects on society. To conclude, in today’s modern era where technology and social media has taken over the source of information, teachers should teach in such relevant manner that it’s helpful and has a positive impact on students.
In recent
times
, we can observe that globalization is at its peak;
so
keeping updates of our
own
surroundings
as well
as at the international level is becoming a need.
Many
people
perceive that teaching
current
affairs to high school pupils is wastage of their
time
; whereas, another group of
people
supports this notion. In my opinion,
students
must
be aware of and know the importance of happenings in the world at the present
time
in a way
that is
not harmful to them.

Firstly
, learning international affairs at high school level will develop an interest at the young age in
students
,
so
that they can decide if they want to pursue their career in this field or not?
Secondly
,
being informed
with the
current
situation of the world; they might take steps at a smaller scale to
reduce
the particular issue.
For example
, global warming is an issue of great importance;
students
can create awareness campaigns in their schools, family, communities etc.
,
to plant more and more trees in their surroundings. When the subject and its content is
properly
reviewed and taught by the tutors; it can have a
positive
influence on the students.

On the other hand
,
many
people
do not support the
idea
of teaching global
news
at the secondary level. According to them,
students
are already burdened; as modern education is getting tougher day by day, due to the competitive environment.
Furthermore
, exposing
students
at an early stage to the harsh and brutal
news
can impact their thinking and can create a
negative
image of the world.
Rather
than revealing the
news
which is not 100% authentic and has detrimental effects,
students
should
be encouraged
in activities which
helps
them in their education. The
news
channels most of the
times
will run any information for the rating without analyzing its effects on society.

To conclude
, in
today
’s modern era where technology and social media has taken over the source of information, teachers should teach in such relevant manner that it’s helpful and has a
positive
impact on
students
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. v. 7

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  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
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